Alsike Equestrian |
I hate cold coffee lmao |
KPH Equestrian |
sipping, I think, would feel a bit more sinister than this guy slamming down coffee xD 'chugs' kind of gives this vibe lmao -Click- |
Nolified |
Munn, help- "The man in black at the corner of the room dwadled his coffee." ok maybe not the best thing to put now that I typed it out.. |
Chateau Montelena |
I love the use of nursing for drinking, like a cold fall morning with a mug in your hands |
Willow Grove |
Hazard Maybe "sips" could work better? Feels a bit more reasonable |
Alsike Equestrian |
I drink normally I would say, enjoying the warmt and taste. I do the same with my best friend espresso <3 |
Nolified |
Gypsy, it says 'at' in my textbook instead of in so I have to keep it that way or it will be wrong.. i'm only supposed to change the action verb |
Willow Grove |
Hazard The mental images for those are pretty different lol. What are you trying to convey? A normal, calm morning or something more rushed? |
Glowing Pines |
Hazard I like the way the second one is rewritten. It puts kind of a silly image of a sinister guy chugging his drink in my mind lol |
Gypsy Family Farm |
Hazard, The man in black IN the corner of the room chugged his coffee." flows better. |
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KPH Equestrian |
sipping, I think, would feel a bit more sinister than this guy slamming down coffee xD 'chugs' kind of gives this vibe lmao -Click- |
Nolified |
Munn, help- "The man in black at the corner of the room dwadled his coffee." ok maybe not the best thing to put now that I typed it out.. |
Chateau Montelena |
I love the use of nursing for drinking, like a cold fall morning with a mug in your hands |
Willow Grove |
Hazard Maybe "sips" could work better? Feels a bit more reasonable |
Alsike Equestrian |
I drink normally I would say, enjoying the warmt and taste. I do the same with my best friend espresso <3 |
Nolified |
Gypsy, it says 'at' in my textbook instead of in so I have to keep it that way or it will be wrong.. i'm only supposed to change the action verb |
Willow Grove |
Hazard The mental images for those are pretty different lol. What are you trying to convey? A normal, calm morning or something more rushed? |
Glowing Pines |
Hazard I like the way the second one is rewritten. It puts kind of a silly image of a sinister guy chugging his drink in my mind lol |
Gypsy Family Farm |
Hazard, The man in black IN the corner of the room chugged his coffee." flows better. |
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