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Gene Anderson Farms
11:17:16 
is it good to have EEE and EEW colts and fillys. how do I get more Ws?
Beamng
11:15:20 Miles Vinuline/Beam
I can't find them. Until I look at Stable Staff.
fire
11:15:11 
where do you buy treats
Gene Anderson Farms
11:08:54 
@Gaelic
I think his sire is named GAF Red Sunset
fire
11:08:19 
nope
Greenheart Stables
11:08:08 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
found them
Greenheart Stables
11:07:43 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
anyone elses buttons for barn manager and Accountant missing??
Aura Show Horses
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Hi chat!
Gaelic Gladiacres
11:07:09 Gladius
@GAF: GAF Rising Sun?
Gene Anderson Farms
11:05:43 
ik this is off topic but I need name for this colt
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Gene Anderson Farms
11:04:48 
one of was the yellow one. so you know he stood out
Blue Diamond
11:04:46 Bluey
ferb?
Greenheart Stables
11:03:56 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
@Void
fair, still its cruel releasing animals used to being feed routinely into the wild who most likely don't even have natural coloration
Gene Anderson Farms
11:03:01 
yeah pretty much. I don't think any town officials found out. I found out about it cause a ex boyfriend I was with knew the person and he took me to meet the guy cause he supposedly bred dogs and when he admitted to me he had done that with the snakes I was yeah no sir. im just gonna leave
The Old Gods
11:02:38 Void Malign
...Florida was also the result on hurricane Andrew (?) hitting a facility.
The Old Gods
11:02:13 Void Malign
Florida is a unique situation. In most other places, the snakes will just end up dying from exposure
Greenheart Stables
11:00:56 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
what.the fuck??? See thats how Florida happens, theres groups who will help rehome snakes. 😭, he might as welll as committed terrorism against all native species in your town
Gene Anderson Farms
10:58:29 
somebody in my town a few years back had pythons and they got too big for him to keep and he just let them go outside.
Greenheart Stables
10:57:28 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
only one of my snakes were properly "bought" the other three were more or less dumped on me lol
Gene Anderson Farms
10:57:00 
my other one is 8 years old and she's got the same name as my daughter Scarllett and she's a orange baboon tarantula and she's so much bigger then my little one named shadow. and she's much more aggressive. she will strike the glass sometimes and when I feed she literally plays a game with her food by watching them for hours run around her tank before she ever decides to get them

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Gene Anderson Farms
11:17:16 
is it good to have EEE and EEW colts and fillys. how do I get more Ws?
Beamng
11:15:20 Miles Vinuline/Beam
I can't find them. Until I look at Stable Staff.
fire
11:15:11 
where do you buy treats
Gene Anderson Farms
11:08:54 
@Gaelic
I think his sire is named GAF Red Sunset
fire
11:08:19 
nope
Greenheart Stables
11:08:08 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
found them
Greenheart Stables
11:07:43 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
anyone elses buttons for barn manager and Accountant missing??
Aura Show Horses
11:07:40 Aura /Pea
Hi chat!
Gaelic Gladiacres
11:07:09 Gladius
@GAF: GAF Rising Sun?
Gene Anderson Farms
11:05:43 
ik this is off topic but I need name for this colt
-HEE Click-
Gene Anderson Farms
11:04:48 
one of was the yellow one. so you know he stood out
Blue Diamond
11:04:46 Bluey
ferb?
Greenheart Stables
11:03:56 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
@Void
fair, still its cruel releasing animals used to being feed routinely into the wild who most likely don't even have natural coloration
Gene Anderson Farms
11:03:01 
yeah pretty much. I don't think any town officials found out. I found out about it cause a ex boyfriend I was with knew the person and he took me to meet the guy cause he supposedly bred dogs and when he admitted to me he had done that with the snakes I was yeah no sir. im just gonna leave
The Old Gods
11:02:38 Void Malign
...Florida was also the result on hurricane Andrew (?) hitting a facility.
The Old Gods
11:02:13 Void Malign
Florida is a unique situation. In most other places, the snakes will just end up dying from exposure
Greenheart Stables
11:00:56 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
what.the fuck??? See thats how Florida happens, theres groups who will help rehome snakes. 😭, he might as welll as committed terrorism against all native species in your town
Gene Anderson Farms
10:58:29 
somebody in my town a few years back had pythons and they got too big for him to keep and he just let them go outside.
Greenheart Stables
10:57:28 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
only one of my snakes were properly "bought" the other three were more or less dumped on me lol
Gene Anderson Farms
10:57:00 
my other one is 8 years old and she's got the same name as my daughter Scarllett and she's a orange baboon tarantula and she's so much bigger then my little one named shadow. and she's much more aggressive. she will strike the glass sometimes and when I feed she literally plays a game with her food by watching them for hours run around her tank before she ever decides to get them

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Im Letting HEE Be My Editors! :D February 19, 2021 10:44 PM


CC Knabbstruppers
 
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Help Me Out!

I'm wanting to write a kind of short story/first chapter to see if I'd like to keep going with this story or if it'll just be a practice book for continued improvement.

Idea:

My plan for this book is to be a story about a barrel racer named Audry. I'm basing it off of my own experiences with riding with frustration and anger ; taking out her anger on her horse. I really want this to be enormously about character development: how she learns to overcome her anger and do away with it, how she copes and betters herself as not only a rider but a person. I'd like it to include the relationship she grows with her horse and their growing success in the barrel racing world.

My Issue & Hardships:

I'm horrible at following through with things, especially drawing. I have a hell of a time with thouroughly executing my writing ideas without burning myself out from all the prep work. So, advice on that would be absolutely amazing! I also am not sure what jackpots/gaming days/pro rodeos look like or feel like. I really want to enter, but me and my horse aren't quite prepared for that. So, if you guys have experiences with those things, I'd love to hear about them and what you guys saw.

My Half-Ass Storyline!

Beginning: Audry purchases a cheap prospect at auction. She follows through with training him and in the process learns he was well trained. But, in learning his buttons, experiences strong anger and frustration. After senselessly beating her horse in a blind rage, it dawns on her that she needs to figure out how to deal with her anger. So, she begins her trip in finding how to be calm with herself and while riding to better her relationship and rebuild trust with her boy.

Middle: Shows Audry's trials and how she tries to defeat her rage. (Not sure what or how I want these scenes to unfold. If any ideas, I'd love to hear them!) Audry begins to enter local jackpots and gain experience and begin her winning career.

End: Entering her biggest rodeo yet, (a local Pro Rodeo) she suddenly falls back into her darkest place before she is to compete. She is finally able to break down her biggest wall and defeats the three day competition. (Not sure whether I should add anything else).

That's kind of my idea and a rough layout of my plans and what I'd like to put forward. I'm not sure where else to take this prep process, so again, if anybody has ideas for that I'd love them! ^^

Later, when I get a handle on a rough of my first chapter (may turn out to be quite a few pages long, not sure yet. That might be a good thing, what length of chapters do you guys prefer/like?) I'll go ahead and put it up here to see what ya'll think! :D

My Questions:

1. What other prep work can I do?

2. What are your experiences with competing at jackpots/game days/rodeos?

3. What would you guys suggest to do to develop Audry's character thouroughly?

4. How can I conclusively end my story?

5. What are your favorite chapter lengths? 1-5 pages? 6-10? 11+?

Any writing advice, even as a general is greatly appreciated! I don't even care if it pertains to these ideas! Thank you all in advance!

Im Letting HEE Be My Editors! :D February 20, 2021 01:58 PM


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Wow! That's a great idea, I love it! Unfortunately, I can't help you with question #2, as I've never gone to a show before. Audry needs some faults to be a good character, and it sounds like you've already got some, so that's great. Make her a character that people can identify with, not someone that's perfect. There are so many different ways to end a story. I think one of my favorite ways, though, is when it's not calm exactly, but not all the action is at the end.
I think a nice chapter length is between 5-10 pages.
I also write, I don't publish, but I love to write. Pm me if you want some more help. Again, I love this idea!
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CC Knabbstruppers
 
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Elsea Acres said:
Wow! That's a great idea, I love it! Unfortunately, I can't help you with question #2, as I've never gone to a show before. Audry needs some faults to be a good character, and it sounds like you've already got some, so that's great. Make her a character that people can identify with, not someone that's perfect. There are so many different ways to end a story. I think one of my favorite ways, though, is when it's not calm exactly, but not all the action is at the end.
I think a nice chapter length is between 5-10 pages.
I also write, I don't publish, but I love to write. Pm me if you want some more help. Again, I love this idea!


Thank you so much! :D
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Your welcome! I hope I helped you.
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Whoops. I switched accounts. That's still me.
Im Letting HEE Be My Editors! :D February 20, 2021 02:24 PM


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I have a few questions to ask. Question One: What role does Audry's family play in this story? Do they help or hinder her on her journey to become a better person? I find when writing that the family should have at least some impact in the story, which would make it more relatable. Question Two: Has she always dealt with situations in similar ways before? It would seem strange if that was the very first time it ever happened, especially if it gets overboard. Question Three: Was there something in her past that might have caused her to act in the way that she does?
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Wild River Stables said:
I have a few questions to ask. Question One: What role does Audry's family play in this story? Do they help or hinder her on her journey to become a better person? I find when writing that the family should have at least some impact in the story, which would make it more relatable. Question Two: Has she always dealt with situations in similar ways before? It would seem strange if that was the very first time it ever happened, especially if it gets overboard. Question Three: Was there something in her past that might have caused her to act in the way that she does?


I definitely want Audry's dad to play a major role in helping her start up her career and helping her get through her frustration.
I think I'll bring up some parts in the story that shows she has been through it before, but hasn't realized it was an issue until she unfairly brought her horse into it.
Maybe her mom's passing could've made it to where she bottles up her feelings? Or maybe she never knew her mom and instead her first horse's tragic passing makes it hard on her? What do you think would be more interesting? I feel like the parent passing away is a very overused cliche.

Edited at February 20, 2021 02:28 PM by CC Knabbstruppers
Im Letting HEE Be My Editors! :D February 20, 2021 02:33 PM


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So I've written a few full-length equestrian novels (on wattpad, but still) and I've picked up a few things along the way, so feel free to message me if you ever find yourself needing feedback!
That being said, here are some of the biggest things I've picked up over the years:
Make your horse a character! So many books I've read have had the horse doing nothing but existing while the riders ride around and have crisises and virtually ignore the horse unless they're on it or describing tack in great detail (also: don't do that). Figure out your horse, and let it breathe and have a personality of it's own. Smart, dumb, slow, fast, spooky, bombproof? And let the horse have a bit of character development. Maybe it's a bit stubborn at the beginning of the story but learns to respect its rider at the end. Maybe it had an accident and has to learn to trust again. Regardless, bring your horse to life!
Another thing I've learned is that you need to stock up on side characters. Let the story feel full of life and people and their own quirks. If you find yourself really enjoying one side character, use that! Let them have a bigger role than you may have originally planned. One of my all-time favorite side characters was supposed to be briefly mentioned in my main character's class and ended up becoming his love interest and having a whole character arc of his own outside of the romance as well. It was really fun and some of my favorite writing and it was COMPLETELY unplanned. Basically- if you want to do something, do it. Readers can tell when a writer enjoyed writing something, and it makes the reading experience so much better.
My last piece of advice is one I think you've already discovered, given recent conversations and the topic of your story, but I'll say it regardless. Let yourself explore emotions and feelings and scenarios in your story. You'll discover things about you, and it's a safe place to try new things and see how they work without having real world repercussions. That's a hugely important part of storytelling that I think a lot of people overlook, but it's there for a reason. Stories, while they seem fabricated on the surface, inhibit something that's actually brutally honest. So use that. Stories can be so, so good for you.
Im Letting HEE Be My Editors! :D February 20, 2021 02:36 PM


Wild River Stables
 
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CC Knabbstruppers said:

Wild River Stables said:
I have a few questions to ask. Question One: What role does Audry's family play in this story? Do they help or hinder her on her journey to become a better person? I find when writing that the family should have at least some impact in the story, which would make it more relatable. Question Two: Has she always dealt with situations in similar ways before? It would seem strange if that was the very first time it ever happened, especially if it gets overboard. Question Three: Was there something in her past that might have caused her to act in the way that she does?


I definitely want Audry's dad to play a major role in helping her start up her career and helping her get through her frustration.
I think I'll bring up some parts in the story that shows she has been through it before, but hasn't realized it was an issue until she unfairly brought her horse into it.
Maybe her mom's passing could've made it to where she bottles up her feelings? Or maybe she never knew her mom and instead her first horse's tragic passing makes it hard on her? What do you think would be more interesting? I feel like the parent passing away is a very overused cliche.


I think the parent's passing and the first horse's passing are both commonly used in equestrian books, although you can bring that into the story if you want to(it is your story after all). I noticed that very few, if any, of the equestrian books I've read had the death of a main character's friend. Perhaps she had a friend who also liked horses, but died in a horse related accident. That could explain some of the anger she feels towards her horse.

Edited at February 20, 2021 02:40 PM by Wild River Stables
Im Letting HEE Be My Editors! :D February 20, 2021 02:36 PM


CC Knabbstruppers
 
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FirstLightFarms said:
So I've written a few full-length equestrian novels (on wattpad, but still) and I've picked up a few things along the way, so feel free to message me if you ever find yourself needing feedback!
That being said, here are some of the biggest things I've picked up over the years:
Make your horse a character! So many books I've read have had the horse doing nothing but existing while the riders ride around and have crisises and virtually ignore the horse unless they're on it or describing tack in great detail (also: don't do that). Figure out your horse, and let it breathe and have a personality of it's own. Smart, dumb, slow, fast, spooky, bombproof? And let the horse have a bit of character development. Maybe it's a bit stubborn at the beginning of the story but learns to respect its rider at the end. Maybe it had an accident and has to learn to trust again. Regardless, bring your horse to life!
Another thing I've learned is that you need to stock up on side characters. Let the story feel full of life and people and their own quirks. If you find yourself really enjoying one side character, use that! Let them have a bigger role than you may have originally planned. One of my all-time favorite side characters was supposed to be briefly mentioned in my main character's class and ended up becoming his love interest and having a whole character arc of his own outside of the romance as well. It was really fun and some of my favorite writing and it was COMPLETELY unplanned. Basically- if you want to do something, do it. Readers can tell when a writer enjoyed writing something, and it makes the reading experience so much better.
My last piece of advice is one I think you've already discovered, given recent conversations and the topic of your story, but I'll say it regardless. Let yourself explore emotions and feelings and scenarios in your story. You'll discover things about you, and it's a safe place to try new things and see how they work without having real world repercussions. That's a hugely important part of storytelling that I think a lot of people overlook, but it's there for a reason. Stories, while they seem fabricated on the surface, inhibit something that's actually brutally honest. So use that. Stories can be so, so good for you.


Thank you for that! I've always struggled with side characters, I've always found them boring, but in this one, I want side characters to be a big portion of the crowd and helping Audry or maybe criticising. I want this to be a good story something awful! XD I've never finished a book before, so if I can do this, I would be so ecstatic!

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