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Nessie
02:29:55 
gonna post these in a blog
-HEE Click-
Nightingales Ridge
02:15:19 𔓘 Issy
Fang eesh great start. Or was it the plane that was late
Minerva
02:09:34 Min
Just realised I never actually remembered to enter this bloody show 🙈 Ive sent a pleading email but poor Minnie might have endured 2 days of bathing for no reason 🤣🤣
Whitewolf
01:51:10 Fang
He’s finally here. 5 hours late. Woohoo 🙌
Zoombles
01:45:46 Zomb
A nice little welcome back to X’s
-HEE Click-
Laika Groves
01:44:56 Laika
finished another yhh c:
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Centura stable
01:43:45 Centura
I had a wild bay colt with this pattern who I strongly regrett gelding getting rid of 2 weeks ago
Whitewolf
01:40:30 Fang
She is, I like blue roans and snowflakes
Centura stable
01:39:05 Centura
-HEE Click-
This filly is kinds pretty, what do you guys think?
Whitewolf
01:37:43 Fang
Thank you <3 rare I keep or buy EEE but I made an exception lol
Santana Rising
01:35:19 San
Really like those dark dappled ones! I hope she gives you some W foals when she's ready
Centura stable
01:34:46 Centura
Fang
she is stunning
Whitewolf
01:31:16 Fang
One of my new favorites, just wish she had one W
-HEE Click-
Centura stable
01:28:49 Centura
-HEE Click-
This mare is stunning
Whitewolf
01:27:25 Fang
To what? Man driving down here it was super foggy
Guard Horseman Gang
01:09:37 GHG
I need someone to n g ell n keep me up
Whitewolf
01:08:16 Fang
Well I’m off to wait. Ugh. I made sure the damn flight is actually en route first >.>
MC Ace
01:05:10 McFossil
Yeah, I relented.
Timber Creek Stables
01:02:32 
Are we not allowed to post LF's in Sales Chat?
Whitewolf
01:02:25 Fang
Arrives in 42 minutes. Might just go sit at airport like a zombie

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Nessie
02:29:55 
gonna post these in a blog
-HEE Click-
Nightingales Ridge
02:15:19 𔓘 Issy
Fang eesh great start. Or was it the plane that was late
Minerva
02:09:34 Min
Just realised I never actually remembered to enter this bloody show 🙈 Ive sent a pleading email but poor Minnie might have endured 2 days of bathing for no reason 🤣🤣
Whitewolf
01:51:10 Fang
He’s finally here. 5 hours late. Woohoo 🙌
Zoombles
01:45:46 Zomb
A nice little welcome back to X’s
-HEE Click-
Laika Groves
01:44:56 Laika
finished another yhh c:
-Click-
Centura stable
01:43:45 Centura
I had a wild bay colt with this pattern who I strongly regrett gelding getting rid of 2 weeks ago
Whitewolf
01:40:30 Fang
She is, I like blue roans and snowflakes
Centura stable
01:39:05 Centura
-HEE Click-
This filly is kinds pretty, what do you guys think?
Whitewolf
01:37:43 Fang
Thank you <3 rare I keep or buy EEE but I made an exception lol
Santana Rising
01:35:19 San
Really like those dark dappled ones! I hope she gives you some W foals when she's ready
Centura stable
01:34:46 Centura
Fang
she is stunning
Whitewolf
01:31:16 Fang
One of my new favorites, just wish she had one W
-HEE Click-
Centura stable
01:28:49 Centura
-HEE Click-
This mare is stunning
Whitewolf
01:27:25 Fang
To what? Man driving down here it was super foggy
Guard Horseman Gang
01:09:37 GHG
I need someone to n g ell n keep me up
Whitewolf
01:08:16 Fang
Well I’m off to wait. Ugh. I made sure the damn flight is actually en route first >.>
MC Ace
01:05:10 McFossil
Yeah, I relented.
Timber Creek Stables
01:02:32 
Are we not allowed to post LF's in Sales Chat?
Whitewolf
01:02:25 Fang
Arrives in 42 minutes. Might just go sit at airport like a zombie

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   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
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Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


FirstLightFarms

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Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

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