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Gaelic Gladiacres
06:28:24 Gladius
AL - ooooh there it is. thank you!
ArcticLights
06:27:10 Ceci / (Call me) AL
Nevermind, I forgot I adjusted the zooming in thing
Requiem
06:26:59 Dimmed
Yeah some young girl tried making a UTurn into oncoming traffic as I was going through the intersection :') I just miss my car mostly. Almost had her paid off.
ArcticLights
06:26:33 Ceci / (Call me) AL
Gladius, for me its on the left side on the news page
ArcticLights
06:25:58 Ceci / (Call me) AL
Car accident?? Oh god, that sounds horrible but glad you are ok <3
Requiem
06:24:46 Dimmed
Yes we are all well! I don't know if I told you but me and Mav (19 month old) got into a car accident on the 13th. Totaled our car. We are both ok and so is baby, but we just barely got a new car today so it's been hell juggling one vehicle and dealing with insurance.

Then last week my furnace kept stopping so my dad had to come over 3 times with new parts and basically rebuilt the whole thing. Thankfully it's been working almost too well now. But it's just been one thing after another this month
Gaelic Gladiacres
06:24:34 Gladius
where's the timer...?
NeverGonnaTrivYouUp
06:23:52 The Mane Brains
lol I can put you in 202
WildWind Equestrians
06:23:51 Wild
-HEE Click- I know I shouldn't have expected much, but she could at least have an E...I mean... look how...radiant she is
ArcticLights
06:23:41 Ceci / (Call me) AL
Does RO timer say 6 or 8 hours?
Requiem
06:22:31 Dimmed
OH well then move me on up! 😂
Requiem
06:22:07 Dimmed
Also I thought her dams name was sciatica for a moment there 😂 I was like "oh what a pretty name"
NeverGonnaTrivYouUp
06:21:59 The Mane Brains
I need to change her list around, since Zomb dropped pons Lees taking her second next month and now everything is all fucky lol
WildWind Equestrians
06:21:50 Wild
you mean like till midnight up? not me. I have better things to do... like sleep. you know. so I don't fall asleep again in science
Arctic Dusk
06:21:48 AL - RIDs *sigh*
Exciting Dimmy, hope you and baby is doing well (and also the rest of the family)
Gaelic Gladiacres
06:21:33 Gladius
RO's like 1-2AM my time, I really shouldn't ;;.;; I will most likely be doing it tomorrow morning. but crossing my fingers my LCs will still be open...
Requiem
06:21:24 Dimmed
Trish you forgot to put me on her 203 list ;)
Requiem
06:20:56 Dimmed
Baby #2, due August 9th
NeverGonnaTrivYouUp
06:20:49 The Mane Brains
-HEE Click- I still dunno what to put her to, I have a sven for it but not a stud lmao
Requiem
06:20:40 Dimmed
Ooh maybe you can snag a straw? Idk how long his LC stay up

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Gaelic Gladiacres
06:28:24 Gladius
AL - ooooh there it is. thank you!
ArcticLights
06:27:10 Ceci / (Call me) AL
Nevermind, I forgot I adjusted the zooming in thing
Requiem
06:26:59 Dimmed
Yeah some young girl tried making a UTurn into oncoming traffic as I was going through the intersection :') I just miss my car mostly. Almost had her paid off.
ArcticLights
06:26:33 Ceci / (Call me) AL
Gladius, for me its on the left side on the news page
ArcticLights
06:25:58 Ceci / (Call me) AL
Car accident?? Oh god, that sounds horrible but glad you are ok <3
Requiem
06:24:46 Dimmed
Yes we are all well! I don't know if I told you but me and Mav (19 month old) got into a car accident on the 13th. Totaled our car. We are both ok and so is baby, but we just barely got a new car today so it's been hell juggling one vehicle and dealing with insurance.

Then last week my furnace kept stopping so my dad had to come over 3 times with new parts and basically rebuilt the whole thing. Thankfully it's been working almost too well now. But it's just been one thing after another this month
Gaelic Gladiacres
06:24:34 Gladius
where's the timer...?
NeverGonnaTrivYouUp
06:23:52 The Mane Brains
lol I can put you in 202
WildWind Equestrians
06:23:51 Wild
-HEE Click- I know I shouldn't have expected much, but she could at least have an E...I mean... look how...radiant she is
ArcticLights
06:23:41 Ceci / (Call me) AL
Does RO timer say 6 or 8 hours?
Requiem
06:22:31 Dimmed
OH well then move me on up! 😂
Requiem
06:22:07 Dimmed
Also I thought her dams name was sciatica for a moment there 😂 I was like "oh what a pretty name"
NeverGonnaTrivYouUp
06:21:59 The Mane Brains
I need to change her list around, since Zomb dropped pons Lees taking her second next month and now everything is all fucky lol
WildWind Equestrians
06:21:50 Wild
you mean like till midnight up? not me. I have better things to do... like sleep. you know. so I don't fall asleep again in science
Arctic Dusk
06:21:48 AL - RIDs *sigh*
Exciting Dimmy, hope you and baby is doing well (and also the rest of the family)
Gaelic Gladiacres
06:21:33 Gladius
RO's like 1-2AM my time, I really shouldn't ;;.;; I will most likely be doing it tomorrow morning. but crossing my fingers my LCs will still be open...
Requiem
06:21:24 Dimmed
Trish you forgot to put me on her 203 list ;)
Requiem
06:20:56 Dimmed
Baby #2, due August 9th
NeverGonnaTrivYouUp
06:20:49 The Mane Brains
-HEE Click- I still dunno what to put her to, I have a sven for it but not a stud lmao
Requiem
06:20:40 Dimmed
Ooh maybe you can snag a straw? Idk how long his LC stay up

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   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
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Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


FirstLightFarms

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Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

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