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Vahana Hollow
04:34:26 Val
Someone take my ebs away from me so that I dont spend them all on captures instead of paying my riders tomorrow ;-;
Whitewolf
04:20:35 Fang
We are definitely a lot alike lol
Thank you, you get some rest as well later. Goodnight <3
Red Hill Hollow
04:19:41 Red, Hollow
Ok, goodnight Fang <3 you have a good rest :)
Red Hill Hollow
04:19:24 Red, Hollow
I honestly wish I could shut it down. I feel way too much, I’m very overly sensitive. But yes absolutely, talking with you and everyone else helps so much :) it’s good to find some kindness in the world.
Hahah same here, even my teachers were concerned. Although my mum has told me that I’m “f*cked in the head” on multiple occasions
Whitewolf
04:18:28 Fang
Well I’m going to attempt to get a little more rest, I can feel the pm pain pill helping, lol.
I enjoyed our talk as always and hope the rest of the game is enjoyable for ya :) glad you’re feeling better somewhat as well <3
Whitewolf
04:17:29 Fang
I have to try to feel because I will shut down on my own - it’s why talking to you and everyone helps so much.
My mom admitted she thought something was really wrong with me in school because I hardly talked 😂
Red Hill Hollow
04:16:17 Red, Hollow
Hahah it’s ok, I’m sure half of my messages are hard to read. My dyslexia and terrible typing skills aren’t a great combo lol
Red Hill Hollow
04:15:42 Red, Hollow
Yeah I can understand that. I’m pumped up on so much Zoloft that I don’t feel much anymore haha but definitely before I got on my meds I got so hurt and angry at people
Whitewolf
04:14:45 Fang
*I’m lol words fail me at 4am
Whitewolf
04:14:02 Fang
Like you as well <3 though I got to say sometimes I find it hard to be nice when people are so crappy lol
Seems easier to be angry or mean or not care but ok holding on to the person I want to be - even if by a thread somedays lol
Red Hill Hollow
04:11:47 Red, Hollow
Yeah, there are just some horrible people in the world. But it’s really nice to know that there are good people like you still around <3
Whitewolf
04:10:47 Fang
Sheesh, sometimes people just need a good whack with a cast iron skillet to put some sense into them. All it means though is guys that say that crap definitely don’t deserve you!
Red Hill Hollow
04:09:24 Red, Hollow
Fang* dumb ass auto correct lol
Red Hill Hollow
04:09:05 Red, Hollow
Thank you gang <3 you’re the sweetest. It’s hard bc my bf is very conventionally attractive and I’m a lil quirky looking. I’ve built myself a good body in the gym but it’s my face that bothers me. This guy at uni said “guys only sleep with her bc of her body bc her face is gross” made me cry quite a lot haha
Whitewolf
04:07:38 Fang
Cheesy is welcome lol all in good time <3
Whitewolf
04:07:17 Fang
Red, I know I’m not pretty or anything so it’s hard for me to believe anyone too. I definitely get you. Always remember you’re beautiful and smart and kind and a really good friend and person <3 just helping me during my darkest days is something I’ll always be thankful for
Red Hill Hollow
04:06:41 Red, Hollow
XD that’s amazing! Sometimes it’s good to know people
Yes don’t worry things will absolutely get better <3 sounds cheesy but it’s the truth, just work on yourself and doing things for you. You’ll heal <3
Red Hill Hollow
04:05:42 Red, Hollow
Oh yeah, he was an idiot. Glad I didn’t waste too much time with him. Luckily I have a bf now who tells me that I’m beautiful all the time. Although I’ve had a lot of people call me ugly throughout my life, so it’s hard to believe him sometimes
Whitewolf
04:05:36 Fang
I’m happy you’re doing better and hoping that’s me in a year from now lol you give me hope !
Whitewolf
04:05:05 Fang
I definitely will lol she loves celebrating those kinda holidays and she will deliver for free XD

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Vahana Hollow
04:34:26 Val
Someone take my ebs away from me so that I dont spend them all on captures instead of paying my riders tomorrow ;-;
Whitewolf
04:20:35 Fang
We are definitely a lot alike lol
Thank you, you get some rest as well later. Goodnight <3
Red Hill Hollow
04:19:41 Red, Hollow
Ok, goodnight Fang <3 you have a good rest :)
Red Hill Hollow
04:19:24 Red, Hollow
I honestly wish I could shut it down. I feel way too much, I’m very overly sensitive. But yes absolutely, talking with you and everyone else helps so much :) it’s good to find some kindness in the world.
Hahah same here, even my teachers were concerned. Although my mum has told me that I’m “f*cked in the head” on multiple occasions
Whitewolf
04:18:28 Fang
Well I’m going to attempt to get a little more rest, I can feel the pm pain pill helping, lol.
I enjoyed our talk as always and hope the rest of the game is enjoyable for ya :) glad you’re feeling better somewhat as well <3
Whitewolf
04:17:29 Fang
I have to try to feel because I will shut down on my own - it’s why talking to you and everyone helps so much.
My mom admitted she thought something was really wrong with me in school because I hardly talked 😂
Red Hill Hollow
04:16:17 Red, Hollow
Hahah it’s ok, I’m sure half of my messages are hard to read. My dyslexia and terrible typing skills aren’t a great combo lol
Red Hill Hollow
04:15:42 Red, Hollow
Yeah I can understand that. I’m pumped up on so much Zoloft that I don’t feel much anymore haha but definitely before I got on my meds I got so hurt and angry at people
Whitewolf
04:14:45 Fang
*I’m lol words fail me at 4am
Whitewolf
04:14:02 Fang
Like you as well <3 though I got to say sometimes I find it hard to be nice when people are so crappy lol
Seems easier to be angry or mean or not care but ok holding on to the person I want to be - even if by a thread somedays lol
Red Hill Hollow
04:11:47 Red, Hollow
Yeah, there are just some horrible people in the world. But it’s really nice to know that there are good people like you still around <3
Whitewolf
04:10:47 Fang
Sheesh, sometimes people just need a good whack with a cast iron skillet to put some sense into them. All it means though is guys that say that crap definitely don’t deserve you!
Red Hill Hollow
04:09:24 Red, Hollow
Fang* dumb ass auto correct lol
Red Hill Hollow
04:09:05 Red, Hollow
Thank you gang <3 you’re the sweetest. It’s hard bc my bf is very conventionally attractive and I’m a lil quirky looking. I’ve built myself a good body in the gym but it’s my face that bothers me. This guy at uni said “guys only sleep with her bc of her body bc her face is gross” made me cry quite a lot haha
Whitewolf
04:07:38 Fang
Cheesy is welcome lol all in good time <3
Whitewolf
04:07:17 Fang
Red, I know I’m not pretty or anything so it’s hard for me to believe anyone too. I definitely get you. Always remember you’re beautiful and smart and kind and a really good friend and person <3 just helping me during my darkest days is something I’ll always be thankful for
Red Hill Hollow
04:06:41 Red, Hollow
XD that’s amazing! Sometimes it’s good to know people
Yes don’t worry things will absolutely get better <3 sounds cheesy but it’s the truth, just work on yourself and doing things for you. You’ll heal <3
Red Hill Hollow
04:05:42 Red, Hollow
Oh yeah, he was an idiot. Glad I didn’t waste too much time with him. Luckily I have a bf now who tells me that I’m beautiful all the time. Although I’ve had a lot of people call me ugly throughout my life, so it’s hard to believe him sometimes
Whitewolf
04:05:36 Fang
I’m happy you’re doing better and hoping that’s me in a year from now lol you give me hope !
Whitewolf
04:05:05 Fang
I definitely will lol she loves celebrating those kinda holidays and she will deliver for free XD

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   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
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Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


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Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

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