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Transformers Acres
11:23:03 Geek, Greek Yogurt
If I had insurance, and if I could drive, I'd go to the doctor's. But my mom works 6 days a week, from 7 AM to 5:30 PM, my dad works 5 days a week, from 7 AM to 4:30 PM. :(
Morning Glory Farms
11:22:48 Dino/Digital Tyrant
I am now watching Spirit Im so surprised so many people havent seen it on here😭😭
The Old Gods
11:21:45 Void Malign
Yeah, if they're causing nausea, should be taking them with food/a snack with plenty of liquid
Gaelic Gladiacres
11:19:17 Gladius
seconding Lux, yes
Lunar Wilds
11:18:47 Lux - AAs
Depending on the painkiller, it’s definitely a possible symptom. If it’s consistent and to the point where it’s not worth taking the painkiller to you, talk to a healthcare provider about other options for it.
Gaelic Gladiacres
11:18:25 Gladius
try propping yourself upright, and have a little snack; sometimes not having anything recently in your stomach makes everything bubble, so you don't want to lay down but you shouldn't stand either
123 I don't know
11:16:24 123/Screamin Eagle
Greek
I don't know anything about pain killers, but I hope you will get well soon.
Transformers Acres
11:15:19 Geek, Greek Yogurt
Gem

It's been happening a lot.
Transformers Acres
11:15:04 Geek, Greek Yogurt
Gladius

Around 8/9 tonight. It's now 12:14 AM
Gem
11:14:44 Gem
@Geek
Did you take them with food? If not, that's probably why πŸ˜…
Gaelic Gladiacres
11:14:24 Gladius
have you eaten recently?
Transformers Acres
11:13:48 Geek, Greek Yogurt
Guys, is it normal to feel nauseous after taking pain killers? (I had a migraine.)
Irish Fields
11:02:05 Fawn
I'm sad that Buck hasn't been on since last month because he gave me a WWW last season ;-;
-HEE Click-
Beamng
11:01:05 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Before going to the book fair, my mom had some people working on her Volvo. After we left the book fair, they called and said that the Jaguar was ready.
QualitySH
10:59:24 
holy heck thats a great deal!
Beamng
10:59:01 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Yesterday, I went to a book fair. I got about 20 books for close to 5 dollars. Even got a movie called Jason Bourne.
Golden Crest
10:57:07 | Eve
I can't wait for winter *-*
QualitySH
10:56:52 
I use the bell type alarms that shake im a heavy sleeper
Beamng
10:55:19 Miles Vinuline/Beam
I'm finally stopped sleeping in after using an old alarm clock. It's loud, but helps me to not fall alseep in the morning.
Triple Blue Stables
10:54:28 JJ
I offer relief after seven days lol

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Transformers Acres
11:23:03 Geek, Greek Yogurt
If I had insurance, and if I could drive, I'd go to the doctor's. But my mom works 6 days a week, from 7 AM to 5:30 PM, my dad works 5 days a week, from 7 AM to 4:30 PM. :(
Morning Glory Farms
11:22:48 Dino/Digital Tyrant
I am now watching Spirit Im so surprised so many people havent seen it on here😭😭
The Old Gods
11:21:45 Void Malign
Yeah, if they're causing nausea, should be taking them with food/a snack with plenty of liquid
Gaelic Gladiacres
11:19:17 Gladius
seconding Lux, yes
Lunar Wilds
11:18:47 Lux - AAs
Depending on the painkiller, it’s definitely a possible symptom. If it’s consistent and to the point where it’s not worth taking the painkiller to you, talk to a healthcare provider about other options for it.
Gaelic Gladiacres
11:18:25 Gladius
try propping yourself upright, and have a little snack; sometimes not having anything recently in your stomach makes everything bubble, so you don't want to lay down but you shouldn't stand either
123 I don't know
11:16:24 123/Screamin Eagle
Greek
I don't know anything about pain killers, but I hope you will get well soon.
Transformers Acres
11:15:19 Geek, Greek Yogurt
Gem

It's been happening a lot.
Transformers Acres
11:15:04 Geek, Greek Yogurt
Gladius

Around 8/9 tonight. It's now 12:14 AM
Gem
11:14:44 Gem
@Geek
Did you take them with food? If not, that's probably why πŸ˜…
Gaelic Gladiacres
11:14:24 Gladius
have you eaten recently?
Transformers Acres
11:13:48 Geek, Greek Yogurt
Guys, is it normal to feel nauseous after taking pain killers? (I had a migraine.)
Irish Fields
11:02:05 Fawn
I'm sad that Buck hasn't been on since last month because he gave me a WWW last season ;-;
-HEE Click-
Beamng
11:01:05 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Before going to the book fair, my mom had some people working on her Volvo. After we left the book fair, they called and said that the Jaguar was ready.
QualitySH
10:59:24 
holy heck thats a great deal!
Beamng
10:59:01 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Yesterday, I went to a book fair. I got about 20 books for close to 5 dollars. Even got a movie called Jason Bourne.
Golden Crest
10:57:07 | Eve
I can't wait for winter *-*
QualitySH
10:56:52 
I use the bell type alarms that shake im a heavy sleeper
Beamng
10:55:19 Miles Vinuline/Beam
I'm finally stopped sleeping in after using an old alarm clock. It's loud, but helps me to not fall alseep in the morning.
Triple Blue Stables
10:54:28 JJ
I offer relief after seven days lol

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   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
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Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


FirstLightFarms

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Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

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