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Is the artist rumble public vote?
Dash and Duchess
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Gem, I'm so glad lol, my fillies have had a track record of depressing 7s recently haha
Gem
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Ooo yay that's exciting DD!
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Thank you wolf! I love him so much
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Sierra
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The Undercity
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I rerolled him and i love him so much more *.*
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Dash and Duchess
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Oh gem did I show you that the lady I'm getting your arts for didn't bomb her 7? XD
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Looking forward to seeing the art entries in the next artist rumble
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I'm already excited for the next one!! 😁
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Yay, five more explorations for completing another quest
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*Oo I
Dash and Duchess
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I ooo need to remember to enter the rumble next time it comes around xD
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What was that art contest called that people used to do on here? I think I remember doing it once, it was a tournament or something where artists got a new horse image and background each round and had to come up with a piece.
Nightingales Ridge
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Amb *.*
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Nightingales Ridge
07:17:53 𔓘 Issy
Is the artist rumble public vote?
Dash and Duchess
07:16:19 DD | ~Squizard~
Gem, I'm so glad lol, my fillies have had a track record of depressing 7s recently haha
Gem
07:15:32 Gem
Ooo yay that's exciting DD!
The Undercity
07:14:54 Dory
Thank you wolf! I love him so much
Wolf Dancer
07:14:08 Wolf Burger (Leg)
Sierra
Oh congrats!!!
The Undercity
07:13:44 Dory
I rerolled him and i love him so much more *.*
-HEE Click-
Dash and Duchess
07:10:34 DD | ~Squizard~
Oh gem did I show you that the lady I'm getting your arts for didn't bomb her 7? XD
Glacier Bay Cove
07:09:42 Glacier Kittens
Looking forward to seeing the art entries in the next artist rumble
Gem
07:09:42 Gem
I'm already excited for the next one!! 😁
Glacier Bay Cove
07:08:56 Glacier Kittens
Yay, five more explorations for completing another quest
Dash and Duchess
07:08:54 DD | ~Squizard~
*Oo I
Dash and Duchess
07:08:44 DD | ~Squizard~
I ooo need to remember to enter the rumble next time it comes around xD
Cherry River Elites
07:00:29 Riv
Right! Thanks!
The Old Gods
07:00:15 Void Malign
artist rumble
Morning Glory Farms
07:00:03 Dino/Digital Tyrant
Rumble
Cherry River Elites
06:59:18 Riv
What was that art contest called that people used to do on here? I think I remember doing it once, it was a tournament or something where artists got a new horse image and background each round and had to come up with a piece.
Nightingales Ridge
06:55:03 𔓘 Issy
Amb *.*
Ambrosia
06:46:59 Amb
-HEE Click-
Whoop whoop
Reindeers
06:40:53 Blitzen /| Rein
Is that a Kale I see?
California Valley
06:31:11 Cali | Kale | Calz
Dear item shop, please give me a sven

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   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
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Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


FirstLightFarms

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Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

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