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Fire_Rescue
08:32:51 Rescue/Rookie
and it is the biggest high school in my area. it is only 1 floor. no basement or upstairs.
Fire_Rescue
08:31:57 Rescue/Rookie
I have to walk from the other side of the school to get to my buss.
Maelstrom
08:31:19 Tragedy
Fire Rescue
Have you asked why? As long as you aren't missing your bus I don't think it really matters honestly but I understand it being annoying.
Fire_Rescue
08:30:29 Rescue/Rookie
Tragedy 1st answer to your question yes 2nd answer yes but 3 people which I am one of them are in the same class as me. So how is that fair? They dont let me or the other student leave until 2:53 when my buss leaves at 2:55.
Starlight Forest
08:29:06 Star✨
My horse Nelly isn't getting put down or sold. I made my mind up but I put Nelly in a big but small enough pasture so he can't cause anymore chaos :3
Glacier Bay Cove
08:27:49 Glacier Kittens
Then I give it to her every day
Boulder Creek
08:27:34 
After using my jacket for a week at the barn - I had to vacuum the pockets of all the hay and stuff.
Glacier Bay Cove
08:27:20 Glacier Kittens
Lily gets it every third day, unless she has an asthma attack
Maelstrom
08:27:07 Tragedy
Fire Rescue
What's the issue? Someone is leaving before you? Or before they're supposed to?
The Joker
08:27:01 Ari <3
I have no idea, Rookie
Glacier Bay Cove
08:26:26 Glacier Kittens
Feline asthma is scary
The Joker
08:26:17 Ari <3
When it got to a bad point ours would get a daily inhaler in the morning and an additional emergency one to give her if she had a really bad attack
Glacier Bay Cove
08:25:22 Glacier Kittens
Same with my cat, Ari
Fire_Rescue
08:25:21 Rescue/Rookie
so 2 of my teachers during 7th period tell me to stay in the class room until 2:53 pm and there is a another student who leaves before I do to get on the bus I tried to leave early before 2:53 becuase of the stress on that and they would not let me. So got any ideas? I have talked to them and it is anyoning.
Angels angels
08:25:11 [1k+ brindles] Angel
Yeah I was thinking about that. Hopefully it doesn't get worse with age but it probably will. He is only 3 right now so he has a while
The Joker
08:24:26 Ari <3
Ah ok, ours had to be on an inhaler when it worsened later in her life
Angels angels
08:22:02 [1k+ brindles] Angel
Nah I haven't taken him to the vet and gotten him tested or diagnosed or anything. Like I said majority of the time he is perfectly fine. Just very rarely does he have issues. The first time he has an attack was early this year and it was just for a few seconds like this one
Fire_Rescue
08:21:03 Rescue/Rookie
a problem about school not a problem about assignments it is worse than that.
Fire_Rescue
08:20:00 Rescue/Rookie
it's about school
Glacier Bay Cove
08:18:43 Glacier Kittens
I give Lily fluticasone for her asthma

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Fire_Rescue
08:32:51 Rescue/Rookie
and it is the biggest high school in my area. it is only 1 floor. no basement or upstairs.
Fire_Rescue
08:31:57 Rescue/Rookie
I have to walk from the other side of the school to get to my buss.
Maelstrom
08:31:19 Tragedy
Fire Rescue
Have you asked why? As long as you aren't missing your bus I don't think it really matters honestly but I understand it being annoying.
Fire_Rescue
08:30:29 Rescue/Rookie
Tragedy 1st answer to your question yes 2nd answer yes but 3 people which I am one of them are in the same class as me. So how is that fair? They dont let me or the other student leave until 2:53 when my buss leaves at 2:55.
Starlight Forest
08:29:06 Star✨
My horse Nelly isn't getting put down or sold. I made my mind up but I put Nelly in a big but small enough pasture so he can't cause anymore chaos :3
Glacier Bay Cove
08:27:49 Glacier Kittens
Then I give it to her every day
Boulder Creek
08:27:34 
After using my jacket for a week at the barn - I had to vacuum the pockets of all the hay and stuff.
Glacier Bay Cove
08:27:20 Glacier Kittens
Lily gets it every third day, unless she has an asthma attack
Maelstrom
08:27:07 Tragedy
Fire Rescue
What's the issue? Someone is leaving before you? Or before they're supposed to?
The Joker
08:27:01 Ari <3
I have no idea, Rookie
Glacier Bay Cove
08:26:26 Glacier Kittens
Feline asthma is scary
The Joker
08:26:17 Ari <3
When it got to a bad point ours would get a daily inhaler in the morning and an additional emergency one to give her if she had a really bad attack
Glacier Bay Cove
08:25:22 Glacier Kittens
Same with my cat, Ari
Fire_Rescue
08:25:21 Rescue/Rookie
so 2 of my teachers during 7th period tell me to stay in the class room until 2:53 pm and there is a another student who leaves before I do to get on the bus I tried to leave early before 2:53 becuase of the stress on that and they would not let me. So got any ideas? I have talked to them and it is anyoning.
Angels angels
08:25:11 [1k+ brindles] Angel
Yeah I was thinking about that. Hopefully it doesn't get worse with age but it probably will. He is only 3 right now so he has a while
The Joker
08:24:26 Ari <3
Ah ok, ours had to be on an inhaler when it worsened later in her life
Angels angels
08:22:02 [1k+ brindles] Angel
Nah I haven't taken him to the vet and gotten him tested or diagnosed or anything. Like I said majority of the time he is perfectly fine. Just very rarely does he have issues. The first time he has an attack was early this year and it was just for a few seconds like this one
Fire_Rescue
08:21:03 Rescue/Rookie
a problem about school not a problem about assignments it is worse than that.
Fire_Rescue
08:20:00 Rescue/Rookie
it's about school
Glacier Bay Cove
08:18:43 Glacier Kittens
I give Lily fluticasone for her asthma

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   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
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Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


FirstLightFarms

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Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

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