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Four Peaks Ranch
10:52:03 Four
Sweet, I thought so, thanks all!
Beamng
10:51:40 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Four

It means that your rider cannot enter in any more contests. It's just like if a person retries for their job.
ArcticLights
10:51:30 Ceci / (Call me) AL
Four, no. You need a new rider
Jericho Stables
10:51:27 
Four, nope. They are done. Fire them and hire a new one :)
Four Peaks Ranch
10:50:53 Four
I just had a rider mark "retired" as the mood. What does this mean? Will they still show?
Beamng
10:50:34 Miles Vinuline/Beam
in 2023, I finished 100 books in one month.
Sleepwalker Centre
10:47:23 Walker
Oak,
I never properly finished it because I was listening when it was still ongoing and fell off at one point... now I'd have to relisten to catch up properly!
Munchkin Stables
10:47:17 Munn - PONs
Hell, politicians do that all the time.
lol
Evermore Homestead
10:47:08 
I've only read maybe a dozen books this year ... 🤣 Hard to read with a toddler!
SpottyButts
10:46:14 Zomb
still sad about you
-HEE Click-
Munchkin Stables
10:46:10 Munn - PONs
Just think of the money you're making, while sitting there, doing nothing.
Beamng
10:46:03 Miles Vinuline/Beam
My sister wasn't a big reader. There was an challenge for Summer Reading. We had to read 10 hours or more before we started a new month. I finished 45 hours of reading when the next month started, but my sister had just finished her 10 hours.
ArcticLights
10:45:37 Ceci / (Call me) AL
Sunny, counting down hours until you can go home?
Kingsman
10:44:33 Sun's Shiny PON/SH
Sitting at work exhausted and alone knowing nothing will happen today but I still have to be here >_>
Oakmoss Stud
10:44:17 Oak
Walker, I absolutely love it so far, I'm around a hundred episodes in I think?! So so good
ArcticLights
10:43:41 Ceci / (Call me) AL
I was a big reader when I was younger, now I read just a couple each year
Sleepwalker Centre
10:43:07 Walker
Ohh I loved the magnus archives!
Beamng
10:41:56 Miles Vinuline/Beam
I've had a hard time putting down a book. I hard time to stop reading romance novels. I sometimes spend almost the whole night reading.
Jericho Stables
10:41:50 
2024 I read 141 and in 2023 I read 146
Munchkin Stables
10:41:49 Munn - PONs
pretty little manchado

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Four Peaks Ranch
10:52:03 Four
Sweet, I thought so, thanks all!
Beamng
10:51:40 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Four

It means that your rider cannot enter in any more contests. It's just like if a person retries for their job.
ArcticLights
10:51:30 Ceci / (Call me) AL
Four, no. You need a new rider
Jericho Stables
10:51:27 
Four, nope. They are done. Fire them and hire a new one :)
Four Peaks Ranch
10:50:53 Four
I just had a rider mark "retired" as the mood. What does this mean? Will they still show?
Beamng
10:50:34 Miles Vinuline/Beam
in 2023, I finished 100 books in one month.
Sleepwalker Centre
10:47:23 Walker
Oak,
I never properly finished it because I was listening when it was still ongoing and fell off at one point... now I'd have to relisten to catch up properly!
Munchkin Stables
10:47:17 Munn - PONs
Hell, politicians do that all the time.
lol
Evermore Homestead
10:47:08 
I've only read maybe a dozen books this year ... 🤣 Hard to read with a toddler!
SpottyButts
10:46:14 Zomb
still sad about you
-HEE Click-
Munchkin Stables
10:46:10 Munn - PONs
Just think of the money you're making, while sitting there, doing nothing.
Beamng
10:46:03 Miles Vinuline/Beam
My sister wasn't a big reader. There was an challenge for Summer Reading. We had to read 10 hours or more before we started a new month. I finished 45 hours of reading when the next month started, but my sister had just finished her 10 hours.
ArcticLights
10:45:37 Ceci / (Call me) AL
Sunny, counting down hours until you can go home?
Kingsman
10:44:33 Sun's Shiny PON/SH
Sitting at work exhausted and alone knowing nothing will happen today but I still have to be here >_>
Oakmoss Stud
10:44:17 Oak
Walker, I absolutely love it so far, I'm around a hundred episodes in I think?! So so good
ArcticLights
10:43:41 Ceci / (Call me) AL
I was a big reader when I was younger, now I read just a couple each year
Sleepwalker Centre
10:43:07 Walker
Ohh I loved the magnus archives!
Beamng
10:41:56 Miles Vinuline/Beam
I've had a hard time putting down a book. I hard time to stop reading romance novels. I sometimes spend almost the whole night reading.
Jericho Stables
10:41:50 
2024 I read 141 and in 2023 I read 146
Munchkin Stables
10:41:49 Munn - PONs
pretty little manchado

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   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
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Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


FirstLightFarms

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Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

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