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Port Royal Equines
01:40:16 Elfie
I have 2 fillies that have sat unnamed since March 1st.
Port Royal Equines
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I am looking for a french themed name for her.
WildWind Equestrians
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Elfie
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Nightingales Ridge
01:34:38 𔓘 Issy
Elfie *.*
Port Royal Equines
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-HEE Click-
She's so cute. *-*
Whitewolf
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XD let’s hope it means it’s a sweet horse that produces lots of WWWs
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Good idea, Zen
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01:26:33 Zen's KNNs
Oooh maybe I should start a ratings + bravery program -HEE Click-
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Fang, that's gonna be an awesome horse name xD
Whitewolf
01:21:19 Fang
Foreshadowing sugar
Jericho Stables
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HEE doing me a solid lol. I found packet of sugar then had a quest to fetch sugar packets lol
Glacier Bay Cove
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Now almost ready for RO, and the capture party
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Looking for a roleplay partner for an Idol x Idol idea I've had. PM me!
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I feel that Ven.
SandWitch Arabians
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Lux - if it was my call, I'd go with a Dressage Med.
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01:02:33 Solar/Ria
I don't believe so
Storybrooke Hollow
12:57:30 Equilleon
Ello!
Srry had a quick question, is it possible to exclude more than one coat color, when searching for horses?
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Does this match with a green glass make sense?
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Glacier Bay Cove
12:44:25 Glacier Kittens
That sounds like a good confusion

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Port Royal Equines
01:40:16 Elfie
I have 2 fillies that have sat unnamed since March 1st.
Port Royal Equines
01:39:51 Elfie
I am looking for a french themed name for her.
WildWind Equestrians
01:37:41 Wild
Elfie
*-*
Nightingales Ridge
01:34:38 𔓘 Issy
Elfie *.*
Port Royal Equines
01:29:46 Elfie
-HEE Click-
She's so cute. *-*
Whitewolf
01:29:01 Fang
XD let’s hope it means it’s a sweet horse that produces lots of WWWs
Glacier Bay Cove
01:28:40 Glacier Kittens
Good idea, Zen
Centralia Farms
01:26:33 Zen's KNNs
Oooh maybe I should start a ratings + bravery program -HEE Click-
Oak River Farms
01:26:30 Oakie
Fang, that's gonna be an awesome horse name xD
Whitewolf
01:21:19 Fang
Foreshadowing sugar
Jericho Stables
01:20:16 
HEE doing me a solid lol. I found packet of sugar then had a quest to fetch sugar packets lol
Glacier Bay Cove
01:19:37 Glacier Kittens
Now almost ready for RO, and the capture party
Chat
01:15:09 Tzeentch
-HEE Click- that's a fun look
Astray
01:09:45 Stay |
Looking for a roleplay partner for an Idol x Idol idea I've had. PM me!
Statesman
01:09:20 Sun's Spl TB's
I feel that Ven.
SandWitch Arabians
01:07:33 Witchypoo
Lux - if it was my call, I'd go with a Dressage Med.
Embervale Acres
01:02:33 Solar/Ria
I don't believe so
Storybrooke Hollow
12:57:30 Equilleon
Ello!
Srry had a quick question, is it possible to exclude more than one coat color, when searching for horses?
Lunar Wilds
12:53:15 Lux - AAs
Does this match with a green glass make sense?
-HEE Click-
Glacier Bay Cove
12:44:25 Glacier Kittens
That sounds like a good confusion

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   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
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Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


FirstLightFarms

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Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

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