Horse Eden Eventing Game
Horse Eden Eventing Game


Year: 199   Season: Fall   
$: 0
Forecast: Chilly and Clear with Dropping Temps
Forecast:
Wed 12:41am  
Stables Online:  65 
Chatbox
123 I don't know
12:08:54 123/Screamin Eagle
Good Night, Aura!
Aura Show Horses
11:53:30 Aura /Pea
Night!
Aura Show Horses
11:53:24 Aura /Pea
Beam
That is the worst! That has happened to my parents car too! Not mine yet! 😟
Beamng
11:52:55 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Good Night, Aura!
Aura Show Horses
11:52:35 Aura /Pea
Bye! I have to go to bed! See ya!
Beamng
11:52:19 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Aura
My side of the car already has a dent when my mom first bought the Volvo. Somebody let their shopping cart roll down the parking lot.
Aura Show Horses
11:51:27 Aura /Pea
Beam
Dang! Hitting other peoples cars is not cool!
Beamng
11:48:56 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Aura
I'm doing great. Finished my sewing class. One of the student was so crazy. My mom told me that she had opened her car door and it hit my side of the car.
Blue Diamond
11:47:36 Bluey
Fern?
Aura Show Horses
11:47:27 Aura /Pea
Holly
Cool! My anniversary is soon too!
Beam
I'm good! You?
Hot 2 Trot
11:43:42 ♡Holly♡
Tomorrow will be 2 years since I started playing :0
Hot 2 Trot
11:43:03 ♡Holly♡
Welcome to the game :)
Beamng
11:40:19 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Aura

How are you doing?
Aura Show Horses
11:39:33 Aura /Pea
Hey beam!
Beamng
11:35:37 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Hello, Aura!
Beamng
11:35:27 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Hello, TNC! Welcome to HEE! If you need any help, pm me.
Sales TNC farm
11:31:19 
I hope I can get 1 or 2 advice
Sales TNC farm
11:30:51 
Hi guys its my first time playing this game
Sales TNC farm
11:30:28 
sad
Aura Show Horses
11:26:56 Aura /Pea
-HEE Click- I thought I disliked SH... Oh well 😶

You must be a registered member for more
than 1 day before you can use our chatbox.



Rules   Hide
You are in: Main Chat
View Sales Chat
Quests

Embark on a Quest.

Horse Eden Eventing Game
Chatbox
123 I don't know
12:08:54 123/Screamin Eagle
Good Night, Aura!
Aura Show Horses
11:53:30 Aura /Pea
Night!
Aura Show Horses
11:53:24 Aura /Pea
Beam
That is the worst! That has happened to my parents car too! Not mine yet! 😟
Beamng
11:52:55 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Good Night, Aura!
Aura Show Horses
11:52:35 Aura /Pea
Bye! I have to go to bed! See ya!
Beamng
11:52:19 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Aura
My side of the car already has a dent when my mom first bought the Volvo. Somebody let their shopping cart roll down the parking lot.
Aura Show Horses
11:51:27 Aura /Pea
Beam
Dang! Hitting other peoples cars is not cool!
Beamng
11:48:56 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Aura
I'm doing great. Finished my sewing class. One of the student was so crazy. My mom told me that she had opened her car door and it hit my side of the car.
Blue Diamond
11:47:36 Bluey
Fern?
Aura Show Horses
11:47:27 Aura /Pea
Holly
Cool! My anniversary is soon too!
Beam
I'm good! You?
Hot 2 Trot
11:43:42 ♡Holly♡
Tomorrow will be 2 years since I started playing :0
Hot 2 Trot
11:43:03 ♡Holly♡
Welcome to the game :)
Beamng
11:40:19 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Aura

How are you doing?
Aura Show Horses
11:39:33 Aura /Pea
Hey beam!
Beamng
11:35:37 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Hello, Aura!
Beamng
11:35:27 Miles Vinuline/Beam
Hello, TNC! Welcome to HEE! If you need any help, pm me.
Sales TNC farm
11:31:19 
I hope I can get 1 or 2 advice
Sales TNC farm
11:30:51 
Hi guys its my first time playing this game
Sales TNC farm
11:30:28 
sad
Aura Show Horses
11:26:56 Aura /Pea
-HEE Click- I thought I disliked SH... Oh well 😶

You must be a registered member for more
than 1 day before you can use our chatbox.






Refresh


Forums

→ Horse Eden is a fun game! Sign Up Now!

My Subscriptions
My Bookmarks
My Topics
Latest Topics
Following

Forums > Rider's Lounge > Writer's Nook
   1 

   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
Posts: 1207
#980572
Give Award
Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


FirstLightFarms

Trivia Team
 
Posts: 4028
#980598
Give Award
Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

Forums > Rider's Lounge > Writer's Nook
   1 

Refresh