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Sunni
07:24:38 Sunni bunny
Cali what XD ?
Calela Eventing
07:23:39 Cali
Yay! I’m not delusional
Sunni
07:23:33 Sunni bunny
Drinking the liquid IV is helping a lot.
Rubygem-Chenya
07:20:40 Cheshire
Ok bye faye
Nordic Designs
07:20:02 Keo/ Ice/ Tiny
hola wolfie
Wolf Dancer
07:19:50 Wolf Burger (Leg)
Keo <3
Asteria
07:19:33 Faye<3
im gonna hop off to shower for my day tommorow, ill be back on soon !!
The Joker
07:19:05 Ari <3
Yeah I did 😆 the other day haha
Calela Eventing
07:18:02 Cali
Ari
Lol, I think you said something about a shoulder not to long ago😭 I’m so sleep deprived I couldn’t tell you left from right xD
Icewar Isles
07:16:44 Ice/ Keo/ Tiny
Thanks ari <3
The Joker
07:16:42 Ari <3
Thanksies, my shoulder is a seperate injury I didn't mention actually 😂 but that one is almost healed lol

Faye
I hope that she heals up quickly!
Calela Eventing
07:15:13 Cali
Ari
That’s rough, good luck with the shoulder and the nosebleeds
Asteria
07:13:48 Faye<3
My neice just dislocated her shoulder this afternoon, she fell off of her pony after it spooked and bucked her off, she seems shes doing alright now, and YEESH i feel bad for your nosebleeds yuck!
The Joker
07:12:12 Ari <3
Sounds complicated! And I'm good, dislocated my knee yesterday and had nose bleeds today as well as being sick so I'm taking a day off 😆
White Run Acres
07:11:41 Jay
if I get another RID EEE colt I will scream
Asteria
07:11:27 Faye<3
Ari,
How are you?
im,
I have to return to my nursing course tommorow UGH! then i gotta deal with my horses making sure they get their pasture time tommorow , im in one complete mess.
The Joker
07:08:52 Ari <3
Hello Faye!
Rubygem-Chenya
07:07:51 Cheshire
Oh
Asteria
07:07:38 Faye<3
Ari

HI HI!
Asteria
07:07:31 Faye<3
Chesire

Yes. something with their life just catching up too them.

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Sunni
07:24:38 Sunni bunny
Cali what XD ?
Calela Eventing
07:23:39 Cali
Yay! I’m not delusional
Sunni
07:23:33 Sunni bunny
Drinking the liquid IV is helping a lot.
Rubygem-Chenya
07:20:40 Cheshire
Ok bye faye
Nordic Designs
07:20:02 Keo/ Ice/ Tiny
hola wolfie
Wolf Dancer
07:19:50 Wolf Burger (Leg)
Keo <3
Asteria
07:19:33 Faye<3
im gonna hop off to shower for my day tommorow, ill be back on soon !!
The Joker
07:19:05 Ari <3
Yeah I did 😆 the other day haha
Calela Eventing
07:18:02 Cali
Ari
Lol, I think you said something about a shoulder not to long ago😭 I’m so sleep deprived I couldn’t tell you left from right xD
Icewar Isles
07:16:44 Ice/ Keo/ Tiny
Thanks ari <3
The Joker
07:16:42 Ari <3
Thanksies, my shoulder is a seperate injury I didn't mention actually 😂 but that one is almost healed lol

Faye
I hope that she heals up quickly!
Calela Eventing
07:15:13 Cali
Ari
That’s rough, good luck with the shoulder and the nosebleeds
Asteria
07:13:48 Faye<3
My neice just dislocated her shoulder this afternoon, she fell off of her pony after it spooked and bucked her off, she seems shes doing alright now, and YEESH i feel bad for your nosebleeds yuck!
The Joker
07:12:12 Ari <3
Sounds complicated! And I'm good, dislocated my knee yesterday and had nose bleeds today as well as being sick so I'm taking a day off 😆
White Run Acres
07:11:41 Jay
if I get another RID EEE colt I will scream
Asteria
07:11:27 Faye<3
Ari,
How are you?
im,
I have to return to my nursing course tommorow UGH! then i gotta deal with my horses making sure they get their pasture time tommorow , im in one complete mess.
The Joker
07:08:52 Ari <3
Hello Faye!
Rubygem-Chenya
07:07:51 Cheshire
Oh
Asteria
07:07:38 Faye<3
Ari

HI HI!
Asteria
07:07:31 Faye<3
Chesire

Yes. something with their life just catching up too them.

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   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
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Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


FirstLightFarms

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Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

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