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Gaelic Gladiacres
09:19:07 Gladius
red - oh absolutely. I mean I'm the same kinda person insofar as I prefer not to take on debt if I don't have to but as long as you have a plan to pay it off in a timely fashion and it's within your means it's really not a world-ending issue. and a lot of times rent places want you to bay first month's rent plus deposit up front among other various fees and often that's just not doable without a stop-gap measure
Spellbound Acres
09:18:27 Roan🦋⃤
Gladius,
woohoo!
let the games begin!
Gaelic Gladiacres
09:17:54 Gladius
roan - absolutely not, name away xD
Spellbound Acres
09:17:20 Roan🦋⃤
Completely off topic, would it be wrong of me to rename my herd after my favorite kentucky derby horses?
Red Hill Hollow
09:17:09 Red, Hollow
Yeah I took a small loan out just to cover the bond and costs of moving + furniture. I’m earning enough to pay it off quickly so it’ll be fine :) my parents are just very weird about debt but there’s almost no other options these days. Especially while I’m still in uni
Gaelic Gladiacres
09:15:11 Gladius
pssh. a loan for the first bit of rent isn't awful. just be sure to pay a little more than the principle every payment and it'll be gone in no time
Red Hill Hollow
09:14:33 Red, Hollow
I’m renting 🙃 they’d be chill with me taking a loan to buy
Gaelic Gladiacres
09:13:25 Gladius
red - I mean literally it's impossible to buy just about any real estate without some kind of loan, unless you're in the top 10%... sooooo...
Red Hill Hollow
09:12:42 Red, Hollow
Oof yeah I took out a loan for my apartment. My parents would crucify me if they found out but it’s literally impossible to get a place
Nightingales Ridge
09:01:34 𔓘 Issy
House prices are nutty
Gaelic Gladiacres
08:55:34 Gladius
issy - so for real. boomers really do not get what it's like right now... x-x
Spellbound Acres
08:50:28 Roan🦋⃤
Thank you!
I renamed him in reference to the garland of roses the winning horse of the Kentucky derby receives.
I thought it was quite suiting
Nightingales Ridge
08:50:05 𔓘 Issy
Roan ooo very nice!
Nightingales Ridge
08:49:42 𔓘 Issy
Sadly I'm not earning anything at the moment except my partner sending money and term deposits lol. I've got enough for a deposit with a loan but I'd need to be working again .-.
Spellbound Acres
08:48:13 Roan🦋⃤
oops!!
is this one better perhaps?
-HEE Click-
Nightingales Ridge
08:47:54 𔓘 Issy
Broken link
Nightingales Ridge
08:47:38 𔓘 Issy
Loool Red softened the blow
Spellbound Acres
08:47:38 Roan🦋⃤
decorated and changed his name, formerly sba fright light.
What are our opinions?
-HEE Click-
Nightingales Ridge
08:47:19 𔓘 Issy
Fair though Gladius it's not easy! 1 of my brothers lived completely at home until he bought a house of his own. He's got a pretty good job and his bosses love him which is a great
Red Hill Hollow
08:44:17 Red, Hollow
I only told him about 1 of the new pigs… good thing I didn’t tell him about both xD

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Gaelic Gladiacres
09:19:07 Gladius
red - oh absolutely. I mean I'm the same kinda person insofar as I prefer not to take on debt if I don't have to but as long as you have a plan to pay it off in a timely fashion and it's within your means it's really not a world-ending issue. and a lot of times rent places want you to bay first month's rent plus deposit up front among other various fees and often that's just not doable without a stop-gap measure
Spellbound Acres
09:18:27 Roan🦋⃤
Gladius,
woohoo!
let the games begin!
Gaelic Gladiacres
09:17:54 Gladius
roan - absolutely not, name away xD
Spellbound Acres
09:17:20 Roan🦋⃤
Completely off topic, would it be wrong of me to rename my herd after my favorite kentucky derby horses?
Red Hill Hollow
09:17:09 Red, Hollow
Yeah I took a small loan out just to cover the bond and costs of moving + furniture. I’m earning enough to pay it off quickly so it’ll be fine :) my parents are just very weird about debt but there’s almost no other options these days. Especially while I’m still in uni
Gaelic Gladiacres
09:15:11 Gladius
pssh. a loan for the first bit of rent isn't awful. just be sure to pay a little more than the principle every payment and it'll be gone in no time
Red Hill Hollow
09:14:33 Red, Hollow
I’m renting 🙃 they’d be chill with me taking a loan to buy
Gaelic Gladiacres
09:13:25 Gladius
red - I mean literally it's impossible to buy just about any real estate without some kind of loan, unless you're in the top 10%... sooooo...
Red Hill Hollow
09:12:42 Red, Hollow
Oof yeah I took out a loan for my apartment. My parents would crucify me if they found out but it’s literally impossible to get a place
Nightingales Ridge
09:01:34 𔓘 Issy
House prices are nutty
Gaelic Gladiacres
08:55:34 Gladius
issy - so for real. boomers really do not get what it's like right now... x-x
Spellbound Acres
08:50:28 Roan🦋⃤
Thank you!
I renamed him in reference to the garland of roses the winning horse of the Kentucky derby receives.
I thought it was quite suiting
Nightingales Ridge
08:50:05 𔓘 Issy
Roan ooo very nice!
Nightingales Ridge
08:49:42 𔓘 Issy
Sadly I'm not earning anything at the moment except my partner sending money and term deposits lol. I've got enough for a deposit with a loan but I'd need to be working again .-.
Spellbound Acres
08:48:13 Roan🦋⃤
oops!!
is this one better perhaps?
-HEE Click-
Nightingales Ridge
08:47:54 𔓘 Issy
Broken link
Nightingales Ridge
08:47:38 𔓘 Issy
Loool Red softened the blow
Spellbound Acres
08:47:38 Roan🦋⃤
decorated and changed his name, formerly sba fright light.
What are our opinions?
-HEE Click-
Nightingales Ridge
08:47:19 𔓘 Issy
Fair though Gladius it's not easy! 1 of my brothers lived completely at home until he bought a house of his own. He's got a pretty good job and his bosses love him which is a great
Red Hill Hollow
08:44:17 Red, Hollow
I only told him about 1 of the new pigs… good thing I didn’t tell him about both xD

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   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
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Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


FirstLightFarms

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Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

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