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Sherpa map in stable raid!
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Does wild bay stay if you reroll it
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ohh ok then rip them >:) then you can feel like you're starting the month fresh
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Its like the spiral bound type though so it wouldn't damage any
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maybe don't rip them then as it might damage the planner and the rest of the pages could all fall out >.>
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It is a journal type planner. With each month then pages for each day of the month
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depends, is it like a journal or a big planner for each month where you can take the top page off? Because that's what I do with mine lol but I still keep the pages
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Sherpa map in stable raid!
Alpine Acres
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Yes, because it is a gene
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Buried
Yes it is genetic
Alpine Acres
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Angel
oh I am the same. I love being organised to the point that I'm slightly OCD xD
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-HEE Click-
Welcome to Silverwood Equestrian Estate, simply give us your application form and join today!
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Does wild bay stay if you reroll it
Angels angels
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Lol I like that thinking. I also hate clutter so
Alpine Acres
11:52:51 Lily
ohh ok then rip them >:) then you can feel like you're starting the month fresh
Angels angels
11:52:25 [1k+ brindles] Angel
Its like the spiral bound type though so it wouldn't damage any
Alpine Acres
11:51:41 Lily
Angel
maybe don't rip them then as it might damage the planner and the rest of the pages could all fall out >.>
Peace
11:48:27 Halo / Peace
I have finally finished work, I am freeee
Angels angels
11:47:50 [1k+ brindles] Angel
It is a journal type planner. With each month then pages for each day of the month
Blackthorne Acres
11:44:31 Paradox Elites
I feel you Em, I got scoliosis and I bathe dogs and wait tables as my jobs lol
Alpine Acres
11:43:37 Lily
Angel
depends, is it like a journal or a big planner for each month where you can take the top page off? Because that's what I do with mine lol but I still keep the pages
Insignia Elites
11:42:32 Em
I really shouldn't have this much back issues at my age xD Just was bathing my dog and Im regretting it lol
Nocturne Fields
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Welcome to Silverwood Equestrian Estate, simply give us your application form and join today!
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My planner that I use for school, should I rip out the January pages now that it is February so they aren't in the way? lol
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11:25:39 The Coffee Purist
There’s always an exception
Santana Rising
11:24:42 San
I found an SEW - WC boy today in my capture party leftovers
Columet Farms
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Probably

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   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
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Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


FirstLightFarms

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Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

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