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Sunset River Arabian
02:02:46 Athena - AA/TB
Dimmy
oh I feel like that would be me with the kids
Stormsong Manor
02:02:06 Ven
But I also wanted like four kids and now I am quite done with one
Stormsong Manor
02:01:37 Ven
I always wanted kids but never expected to have any because I didn't plan on a long term relationship. Things worked out :D
Blaze of Glory
02:01:29 Chey
Athena
No xD
I'm very behind on this account
Guinness Hollow
02:01:07 Dimmed | RID
Ven, I'm the same but about kids. When we met I still was strict on not wanting kids. Took a little over a year for that to change 😭😂

When you're with the right person everything works out
Sunset River Arabian
02:00:09 Athena - AA/TB
Wait chey does he have a thread?
Guinness Hollow
02:00:07 Dimmed | RID
-HEE Click-
She makes me sad. I don't know who to send her to next
Ranch Lands Training
02:00:03 Lilly/PON Addict
I've been with my husband for almost 5 years now. We met when he was in town for school. When he graduated and moved home I thought I would load the horses and go with him for the summer, just for fun. Now we have a three year old, been married for 7 months now, and this is the second house we have owned. Yeah we moved fast but it was the right person at the right time
Stormsong Manor
01:59:46 Ven
He converted me I suppose
Idle Lane Farms
01:59:43 Mera
-HEE Click-

Damn varnish
Stormsong Manor
01:59:32 Ven
If you asked me in my early 20s if I'd ever settle down and get married, the answer would have been a hard no
Guinness Hollow
01:59:08 Dimmed | RID
Aww congrats Ven! That's awesome
Stormsong Manor
01:58:39 Ven
Eleven years together this month
Guinness Hollow
01:58:32 Dimmed | RID
Yessss Chey!!
Stormsong Manor
01:58:17 Ven
We got married after a year and a half
Blaze of Glory
01:57:58 Chey
I'm so happy that this guy had a week 7
-HEE Click-
Sunset River Arabian
01:57:44 Athena - AA/TB
Dimmy
Thats what I want. I want to know someone before jumping all in because every time I've given it my all from the start its burned me
Guinness Hollow
01:57:33 Dimmed | RID
My husband took me on our first date Valentine's Day and we got married May 1st that year lol celebrating 6 years this may
Stormsong Manor
01:57:27 Ven
I was out with my girls and he hit me with the "good night. I love you" and it was one of the biggest icks I've ever experienced
Guinness Hollow
01:56:48 Dimmed | RID
omg Ven 😂

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Sunset River Arabian
02:02:46 Athena - AA/TB
Dimmy
oh I feel like that would be me with the kids
Stormsong Manor
02:02:06 Ven
But I also wanted like four kids and now I am quite done with one
Stormsong Manor
02:01:37 Ven
I always wanted kids but never expected to have any because I didn't plan on a long term relationship. Things worked out :D
Blaze of Glory
02:01:29 Chey
Athena
No xD
I'm very behind on this account
Guinness Hollow
02:01:07 Dimmed | RID
Ven, I'm the same but about kids. When we met I still was strict on not wanting kids. Took a little over a year for that to change 😭😂

When you're with the right person everything works out
Sunset River Arabian
02:00:09 Athena - AA/TB
Wait chey does he have a thread?
Guinness Hollow
02:00:07 Dimmed | RID
-HEE Click-
She makes me sad. I don't know who to send her to next
Ranch Lands Training
02:00:03 Lilly/PON Addict
I've been with my husband for almost 5 years now. We met when he was in town for school. When he graduated and moved home I thought I would load the horses and go with him for the summer, just for fun. Now we have a three year old, been married for 7 months now, and this is the second house we have owned. Yeah we moved fast but it was the right person at the right time
Stormsong Manor
01:59:46 Ven
He converted me I suppose
Idle Lane Farms
01:59:43 Mera
-HEE Click-

Damn varnish
Stormsong Manor
01:59:32 Ven
If you asked me in my early 20s if I'd ever settle down and get married, the answer would have been a hard no
Guinness Hollow
01:59:08 Dimmed | RID
Aww congrats Ven! That's awesome
Stormsong Manor
01:58:39 Ven
Eleven years together this month
Guinness Hollow
01:58:32 Dimmed | RID
Yessss Chey!!
Stormsong Manor
01:58:17 Ven
We got married after a year and a half
Blaze of Glory
01:57:58 Chey
I'm so happy that this guy had a week 7
-HEE Click-
Sunset River Arabian
01:57:44 Athena - AA/TB
Dimmy
Thats what I want. I want to know someone before jumping all in because every time I've given it my all from the start its burned me
Guinness Hollow
01:57:33 Dimmed | RID
My husband took me on our first date Valentine's Day and we got married May 1st that year lol celebrating 6 years this may
Stormsong Manor
01:57:27 Ven
I was out with my girls and he hit me with the "good night. I love you" and it was one of the biggest icks I've ever experienced
Guinness Hollow
01:56:48 Dimmed | RID
omg Ven 😂

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   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
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Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


FirstLightFarms

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Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

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