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MakeEm Fancy
04:09:19 Ally 💜
I would do a D medallion @Willow
Willow Grove
04:09:18 Stalker of Chat
Ohh fancy, Seven
The Seven Sins
04:08:53 Sveven/Karma
I'm super excited. I'm hoping she will be nice to me since I want to do AA's and it was the perfect opportunity to do so.
Willow Grove
04:08:33 Stalker of Chat
Items? Id like a sven but I wont be able to as I have another thats supposed to be svenned
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Wolf Dancer
04:08:26 Wolf Burger (Leg)
Random off topic thing but I fear I have been corrupted by the running shoe community >.> I have bought yet another pair of running shoes and these are fancy fancy ones xD
The Joker
04:08:13 Ari <3
Oh those are both epic matches *-*
The Seven Sins
04:07:43 Sveven/Karma
I have this one, but if the stud gets used for embryo cover before then, I have the one below it :3
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Insignia Elites
04:06:02 Em
I have quite a few SD matches and a handful AD this RO. Trying to keep it low xD will see if I get breeding trigger happy lol
The Joker
04:05:17 Ari <3
Ooh which match?
ghost light stables
04:05:17 Ghost-rapcoon
Ari
I second that!
The Seven Sins
04:05:05 Sveven/Karma
I have 3 matches, but 2 of them won't be done until 198 due to them being 2nd embryos. I do have one match this RO and crossing my fingers it will go well!
The Joker
04:04:51 Ari <3
These themes are so me, if a trivia vibe was me this would be it 😂
ghost light stables
04:04:05 Ghost-rapcoon
Definitely joining!
The Joker
04:03:16 Ari <3
Here!
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Angels angels
04:03:10 [1k+ brindles] Angel
I may attend but I don't like the topics so I won't participate lol.
The Feral Equine
04:01:15 Khaos
What are the topics Ari?
Executive Stables
04:01:13 Executive/Lyssa
Ari, me!
MakeEm Fancy
04:01:04 Ally 💜
No problem ghost
Dash and Duchess
04:00:52 DD | ~Squizard~
Ari, me!
ghost light stables
04:00:18 Ghost-rapcoon
Thanks Ally!

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MakeEm Fancy
04:09:19 Ally 💜
I would do a D medallion @Willow
Willow Grove
04:09:18 Stalker of Chat
Ohh fancy, Seven
The Seven Sins
04:08:53 Sveven/Karma
I'm super excited. I'm hoping she will be nice to me since I want to do AA's and it was the perfect opportunity to do so.
Willow Grove
04:08:33 Stalker of Chat
Items? Id like a sven but I wont be able to as I have another thats supposed to be svenned
-HEE Click-
Wolf Dancer
04:08:26 Wolf Burger (Leg)
Random off topic thing but I fear I have been corrupted by the running shoe community >.> I have bought yet another pair of running shoes and these are fancy fancy ones xD
The Joker
04:08:13 Ari <3
Oh those are both epic matches *-*
The Seven Sins
04:07:43 Sveven/Karma
I have this one, but if the stud gets used for embryo cover before then, I have the one below it :3
-HEE Click-
-HEE Click-
Insignia Elites
04:06:02 Em
I have quite a few SD matches and a handful AD this RO. Trying to keep it low xD will see if I get breeding trigger happy lol
The Joker
04:05:17 Ari <3
Ooh which match?
ghost light stables
04:05:17 Ghost-rapcoon
Ari
I second that!
The Seven Sins
04:05:05 Sveven/Karma
I have 3 matches, but 2 of them won't be done until 198 due to them being 2nd embryos. I do have one match this RO and crossing my fingers it will go well!
The Joker
04:04:51 Ari <3
These themes are so me, if a trivia vibe was me this would be it 😂
ghost light stables
04:04:05 Ghost-rapcoon
Definitely joining!
The Joker
04:03:16 Ari <3
Here!
-HEE Click-
Angels angels
04:03:10 [1k+ brindles] Angel
I may attend but I don't like the topics so I won't participate lol.
The Feral Equine
04:01:15 Khaos
What are the topics Ari?
Executive Stables
04:01:13 Executive/Lyssa
Ari, me!
MakeEm Fancy
04:01:04 Ally 💜
No problem ghost
Dash and Duchess
04:00:52 DD | ~Squizard~
Ari, me!
ghost light stables
04:00:18 Ghost-rapcoon
Thanks Ally!

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   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
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Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


FirstLightFarms

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Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

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