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The Old Gods
11:14:14 Void Malign
absolutely lol. They're going to have a blast when I get over to the new place because they're going to have so many windows to look out of.
Requiem
11:12:55 Dimmed
Got anything exciting training tomorrow?
Heartbeat Haven
11:12:52 Versa
Aren't all cats, to some capacity?
The Old Gods
11:12:35 Void Malign
These two are little trouble makers lmao
Morning Glory Farms
11:11:18 Dino/Digital Tyrant
heller Dimmy!
Heartbeat Haven
11:11:16 Versa
Sketti is a CH baby so he seriously cannot get onto the counters no matter how hard he tries lol
The Old Gods
11:09:59 Void Malign
...Yeah. Pup's favorite sleeping spot is the shelf in the bathroom lol
Dimmed
11:09:38 Dimmy
Trish e.e
Heartbeat Haven
11:09:17 Versa
Thank gosh Sketti can't climb counters on his own. I just have to close the pantry and keep everything else up high
Cataclysm
11:08:59 Maple Syrup ✨
Versa
Best name for a cat I've ever heard :D
Pearl and Tama will try to grab my food, but they give up pretty fast. Tama likes to yell at me when his kibble is out lol
fire
11:08:49 
-HEE Click-
pair her with this ( my fav stal
The Old Gods
11:08:38 Void Malign
Mind you, Pup has issues with gluten. It's bad enough that I have to put the damn bread in the microwave or she'll find a way to get to it
Heartbeat Haven
11:08:14 Versa
Trish <3
fire
11:08:11 
-HEE Click-
found this
Morning Glory Farms
11:07:53 Dino/Digital Tyrant
Versa <3
Heartbeat Haven
11:07:45 Versa
Eury,
Food-motivated cats are seriously some of the most chaotic beings I've ever encountered, lol

Maple,
Sketti just likes all food. If I'm eating it, he desperately wants it.
Cataclysm
11:07:02 Maple Syrup ✨
Versa
He must really like bread lmao
I think it's probably Pearl (3 month old kitten) launching himself at Tama again if I had to guess
The Old Gods
11:06:55 Void Malign
O_o
The Old Gods
11:06:39 Void Malign
Pup's done that
fire
11:06:30 
i in class and we have sub the teacher has assined the same work and the whole class has finshed so yeah
and my b firend is being a pussy

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The Old Gods
11:14:14 Void Malign
absolutely lol. They're going to have a blast when I get over to the new place because they're going to have so many windows to look out of.
Requiem
11:12:55 Dimmed
Got anything exciting training tomorrow?
Heartbeat Haven
11:12:52 Versa
Aren't all cats, to some capacity?
The Old Gods
11:12:35 Void Malign
These two are little trouble makers lmao
Morning Glory Farms
11:11:18 Dino/Digital Tyrant
heller Dimmy!
Heartbeat Haven
11:11:16 Versa
Sketti is a CH baby so he seriously cannot get onto the counters no matter how hard he tries lol
The Old Gods
11:09:59 Void Malign
...Yeah. Pup's favorite sleeping spot is the shelf in the bathroom lol
Dimmed
11:09:38 Dimmy
Trish e.e
Heartbeat Haven
11:09:17 Versa
Thank gosh Sketti can't climb counters on his own. I just have to close the pantry and keep everything else up high
Cataclysm
11:08:59 Maple Syrup ✨
Versa
Best name for a cat I've ever heard :D
Pearl and Tama will try to grab my food, but they give up pretty fast. Tama likes to yell at me when his kibble is out lol
fire
11:08:49 
-HEE Click-
pair her with this ( my fav stal
The Old Gods
11:08:38 Void Malign
Mind you, Pup has issues with gluten. It's bad enough that I have to put the damn bread in the microwave or she'll find a way to get to it
Heartbeat Haven
11:08:14 Versa
Trish <3
fire
11:08:11 
-HEE Click-
found this
Morning Glory Farms
11:07:53 Dino/Digital Tyrant
Versa <3
Heartbeat Haven
11:07:45 Versa
Eury,
Food-motivated cats are seriously some of the most chaotic beings I've ever encountered, lol

Maple,
Sketti just likes all food. If I'm eating it, he desperately wants it.
Cataclysm
11:07:02 Maple Syrup ✨
Versa
He must really like bread lmao
I think it's probably Pearl (3 month old kitten) launching himself at Tama again if I had to guess
The Old Gods
11:06:55 Void Malign
O_o
The Old Gods
11:06:39 Void Malign
Pup's done that
fire
11:06:30 
i in class and we have sub the teacher has assined the same work and the whole class has finshed so yeah
and my b firend is being a pussy

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   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
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Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


FirstLightFarms

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Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

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