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MC Ace
12:14:17 McFossil
Green is right. Man I remember when we started getting horses up WK3 in the game. That was wild.
Greenheart Stables
12:13:04 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
Wk 3 = 4
Wk 6 = 7
Wk 9 = 10
And so on
Or that's how I treat it, so far its put a lot of my horses on LB and as good producers lol
Wolf Dancer
12:11:45 Wolf Burger (Leg)
Green
Oh interesting
Wolf Dancer
12:11:02 Wolf Burger (Leg)
Ohhhh huh, interesting I have SD but don't ever rember to track xD
Greenheart Stables
12:10:52 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
@Wolf
More of a week 4
Wolf Dancer
12:10:32 Wolf Burger (Leg)
Like isn't a week 3 the equivilent of like a week 7/10 in AD?
MC Ace
12:10:27 McFossil
Wolf
Naw SD need to be up WK3 now. Really hurts my feelings.
Greenheart Stables
12:09:33 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
Does anyone know why my boys straws keep getting taken down from the store? I'm not doing it and its the second time
Wolf Dancer
12:09:12 Wolf Burger (Leg)
Fossil
Pretty *_* Don't they have until week 4 as SD as well though?
Transformers Acres
12:08:57 Geek, Greek Yogurt
My puppy, Molly, won't leave me alone. I can't even shower in peace, just she'll just sit at the door and bark, or whine, or fight her brother, Max, who we also have. Not in a mean way, just puppy romping and playing.
Fairytale Paints
12:08:52 Im Elf
Sting
I agree as well. I joined a Facebook group and alot of the feedback is the same, they're a breed that doesn't like stranger
So I know I'm not alone.
MC Ace
12:08:18 McFossil
I just wanted one colorful one. I've FR'd so many pretties this year. UGH

-HEE Click-
Greenheart Stables
12:07:30 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
Serenity just kinda showed up at the house as a puppy, mom got her from a friend who couldn't keep her and now shes fat, ( fixed and old) and happy using my bed instead of her 100+ dollar dog bed
Fairytale Paints
12:06:03 Im Elf
Sting
Lol. That's how we got Shadow, we went to just look. Out a litter of 9 he came and crawled in my lap. And I knew right then we wouldn't be going home without
He also strangely enough was the biggest out of the litter
Mustang Valley
12:05:29 
My hound x barks whenever she can. And then she gets my other guy going bc, since he's a Pyrenees, he wants to protect us and our animals, but it'll turn out to be a leaf and he looks at my hound like shes insane xD
Narran Park
12:04:35 Sting
And Elf, i think thats okay. I think expecting our dogs to all be social is forcing human things onto them. Our dog isnt social either. She is VERY uncomfortable around other dogs. And men.
Narran Park
12:03:24 Sting
Mr independent, pretty colour will NOT be worth it.
Pick the scruffy one thats sitting in your lap.
Fairytale Paints
12:03:13 Im Elf
Pia
I definitely agree. My Cane Corso doesn't like strangers, even though he's been properly socialized. But then again look at what he's bred for, to guard.
Narran Park
12:02:48 Sting
As some one who has had loads of dogs(grown up in rural australia). Some dogs are definitely better than others.

As a rule of thumb, go and spend time with the litter, let the dog pick you. Which ever is drawn to you and wants to be with you, is the one you take him.
Slow Dreamer Meadows
12:02:30 
pia
yes! I see so many people complain that their hound dogs bark alot or that they cant have small animals, no amount of training can erase genetics imo

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MC Ace
12:14:17 McFossil
Green is right. Man I remember when we started getting horses up WK3 in the game. That was wild.
Greenheart Stables
12:13:04 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
Wk 3 = 4
Wk 6 = 7
Wk 9 = 10
And so on
Or that's how I treat it, so far its put a lot of my horses on LB and as good producers lol
Wolf Dancer
12:11:45 Wolf Burger (Leg)
Green
Oh interesting
Wolf Dancer
12:11:02 Wolf Burger (Leg)
Ohhhh huh, interesting I have SD but don't ever rember to track xD
Greenheart Stables
12:10:52 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
@Wolf
More of a week 4
Wolf Dancer
12:10:32 Wolf Burger (Leg)
Like isn't a week 3 the equivilent of like a week 7/10 in AD?
MC Ace
12:10:27 McFossil
Wolf
Naw SD need to be up WK3 now. Really hurts my feelings.
Greenheart Stables
12:09:33 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
Does anyone know why my boys straws keep getting taken down from the store? I'm not doing it and its the second time
Wolf Dancer
12:09:12 Wolf Burger (Leg)
Fossil
Pretty *_* Don't they have until week 4 as SD as well though?
Transformers Acres
12:08:57 Geek, Greek Yogurt
My puppy, Molly, won't leave me alone. I can't even shower in peace, just she'll just sit at the door and bark, or whine, or fight her brother, Max, who we also have. Not in a mean way, just puppy romping and playing.
Fairytale Paints
12:08:52 Im Elf
Sting
I agree as well. I joined a Facebook group and alot of the feedback is the same, they're a breed that doesn't like stranger
So I know I'm not alone.
MC Ace
12:08:18 McFossil
I just wanted one colorful one. I've FR'd so many pretties this year. UGH

-HEE Click-
Greenheart Stables
12:07:30 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
Serenity just kinda showed up at the house as a puppy, mom got her from a friend who couldn't keep her and now shes fat, ( fixed and old) and happy using my bed instead of her 100+ dollar dog bed
Fairytale Paints
12:06:03 Im Elf
Sting
Lol. That's how we got Shadow, we went to just look. Out a litter of 9 he came and crawled in my lap. And I knew right then we wouldn't be going home without
He also strangely enough was the biggest out of the litter
Mustang Valley
12:05:29 
My hound x barks whenever she can. And then she gets my other guy going bc, since he's a Pyrenees, he wants to protect us and our animals, but it'll turn out to be a leaf and he looks at my hound like shes insane xD
Narran Park
12:04:35 Sting
And Elf, i think thats okay. I think expecting our dogs to all be social is forcing human things onto them. Our dog isnt social either. She is VERY uncomfortable around other dogs. And men.
Narran Park
12:03:24 Sting
Mr independent, pretty colour will NOT be worth it.
Pick the scruffy one thats sitting in your lap.
Fairytale Paints
12:03:13 Im Elf
Pia
I definitely agree. My Cane Corso doesn't like strangers, even though he's been properly socialized. But then again look at what he's bred for, to guard.
Narran Park
12:02:48 Sting
As some one who has had loads of dogs(grown up in rural australia). Some dogs are definitely better than others.

As a rule of thumb, go and spend time with the litter, let the dog pick you. Which ever is drawn to you and wants to be with you, is the one you take him.
Slow Dreamer Meadows
12:02:30 
pia
yes! I see so many people complain that their hound dogs bark alot or that they cant have small animals, no amount of training can erase genetics imo

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Im writing a story (Most likely trash) December 19, 2020 08:38 PM

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This story is about a 12-year-old human-animal hybrid (called an Animorphi) named Auburn, her roommates, and an evil force planning to destroy the human population and let the Animorph rise to greatness. Here's the document, for those who wish to read:
(I changed the settings, it should work)
Any ideas? Comments? Constructive criticism?
PLEASE don't edit the document, leave comments instead!
Im writing a story (Most likely trash) December 20, 2020 02:34 PM

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hi! i didn't read it all through yet, but I definitely have some tips for you c:

-try not to infodump, especially at the beginning of the story. this can definitely deter readers and makes establishing a clear voice difficult. reveal things the POV character knows over time, or more subtly to make it feel more natural, especially when writing in first person.

-try to write numbers and such out in words, this makes the flow seem much less choppy. when listing things that the character is thinking about try to go train of thought and not do a)this and b) this. It doesn't flow very nicely

-with dialogue, especially when it's going fast-paced, you don't need to tag every line if it is clear who's talking! (ex. "woah," she said) it can slow things down and make the dialogue unrealistic.

that's all I have after kinda skimming the first few pages. You're doing a good job! Creating a consistent writing style just takes time! You'll get there eventually, keep it up <3
Im writing a story (Most likely trash) December 20, 2020 02:37 PM

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High Altitude Horses said:
hi! i didn't read it all through yet, but I definitely have some tips for you c:

-try not to infodump, especially at the beginning of the story. this can definitely deter readers and makes establishing a clear voice difficult. reveal things the POV character knows over time, or more subtly to make it feel more natural, especially when writing in first person.

-try to write numbers and such out in words, this makes the flow seem much less choppy. when listing things that the character is thinking about try to go train of thought and not do a)this and b) this. It doesn't flow very nicely

-with dialogue, especially when it's going fast-paced, you don't need to tag every line if it is clear who's talking! (ex. "woah," she said) it can slow things down and make the dialogue unrealistic.

that's all I have after kinda skimming the first few pages. You're doing a good job! Creating a consistent writing style just takes time! You'll get there eventually, keep it up <3


Thank you! I've been going through and deleting all the unnecessary information

Edited at December 20, 2020 02:38 PM by SweetFire Fields

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