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DSD Training Center
04:53:01 Spring <3
Oh no 😭 The ones in my state, Washington, are just pure cheese sauce
SillyBilly Farm
04:52:45 Possum
Wrangler, I'm not very good at that, but it looks great!
Wraithcry Farm
04:51:53 Trigger 🐾
I love Nachos 🤤 I have to be so careful though I am super allergic to Jalapenos and some of these places down here overload their nachos with it 😭
DSD Training Center
04:50:31 Spring <3
The only good thing I have found is Elephant ears and then the Rodeo nachos. Anything else can leave
Wraithcry Farm
04:49:54 Trigger 🐾
Oh yeah. You gotta find the right things 👌
Wrangler Ranch
04:49:37 Wrangler
Thoughts?

-HEE Click-
DSD Training Center
04:47:50 Spring <3
Fair or Rodeo food can either be awesome or nasty
Wraithcry Farm
04:47:01 Trigger 🐾
They are so fun to attend and watch. I like the food at some of the local ones lol
DSD Training Center
04:44:50 Spring <3
I like the rodeos around me a lot because they attract a ton of people headed to the NFR, one of which I know, so we always get a good show. Though this year, there was a horse that died during the Tie Down or something at the Horse Heaven Roundup this year, the day after I went, that unfortunately some of the people I know saw
Wraithcry Farm
04:41:36 Trigger 🐾
I have Old Fort Days in the town I work in. Love that thing. Miss the Dandies
DSD Training Center
04:38:48 Spring <3
There's some smaller ones within like 200 miles of me, but no one really goes to them because the Big 4 (The Horse Heaven Roundup, Walla Walla Frontier Days, Lewiston Roundeup and the Pendleton Roundup,) attract so many people. I have recently gotten interest in roping and barrels and stuff like that, though I've been having to teach Sophie how to rope, but thankfully not run barrels because the guy who trained her also trains barrel horses, so
Wraithcry Farm
04:35:27 Trigger 🐾
We have so many rodeos. So many. All year long. I have nothing against them, I started on barrels. I just, ended up discovering I really did not like it. How I ended up slowing down makes no sense to me, but I love and am passionate about what I do now.
Wraithcry Farm
04:34:02 Trigger 🐾
There is also associations that have their own circuit but limited number of shows.
Like the link I just shared? 5 shows a year lol. The dressage association is about the same where the other circuit will have 7-8 shows and your horse can really be shown off for all its training. I prefer those circuits.
DSD Training Center
04:33:50 Spring <3
We mainly have western circuts, and the only rodeo stuff we have near me that we can do is like Barrel Club and then stuff you do on your own, but that's because my surrounding rodeos are the Big 4.
BlackRose
04:33:44 Stella
Do you mean the basics of it? Sorry for the silly question
Wraithcry Farm
04:31:43 Trigger 🐾
We have maybe 2 circuits that have English and Western events, the rest is rodeo. English is really hard to find and it is also something that is hard to find someone who teaches it safely.
The Old Gods
04:31:00 Void Malign
Anyway. Need to go feed everyone before it gets any colder
BlackRose
04:30:54 Stella
How do I enter dress up contests?
DSD Training Center
04:30:18 Spring <3
We have some big pleasure shows that attract a lot of people from out of state, but we really only have clinics and schooling shows for really any English disciplines.
Wraithcry Farm
04:29:55 Trigger 🐾
I am sorry it is a pet peeve, and I am sorry I struck it, but I am going to stick with what people call it in my area since that makes sense to the people who are around me. And I am also not one who cares about wording either. I am not doing it professionally nor do I plan on competing outside my area. Local only. With that, I am dropping it.

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DSD Training Center
04:53:01 Spring <3
Oh no 😭 The ones in my state, Washington, are just pure cheese sauce
SillyBilly Farm
04:52:45 Possum
Wrangler, I'm not very good at that, but it looks great!
Wraithcry Farm
04:51:53 Trigger 🐾
I love Nachos 🤤 I have to be so careful though I am super allergic to Jalapenos and some of these places down here overload their nachos with it 😭
DSD Training Center
04:50:31 Spring <3
The only good thing I have found is Elephant ears and then the Rodeo nachos. Anything else can leave
Wraithcry Farm
04:49:54 Trigger 🐾
Oh yeah. You gotta find the right things 👌
Wrangler Ranch
04:49:37 Wrangler
Thoughts?

-HEE Click-
DSD Training Center
04:47:50 Spring <3
Fair or Rodeo food can either be awesome or nasty
Wraithcry Farm
04:47:01 Trigger 🐾
They are so fun to attend and watch. I like the food at some of the local ones lol
DSD Training Center
04:44:50 Spring <3
I like the rodeos around me a lot because they attract a ton of people headed to the NFR, one of which I know, so we always get a good show. Though this year, there was a horse that died during the Tie Down or something at the Horse Heaven Roundup this year, the day after I went, that unfortunately some of the people I know saw
Wraithcry Farm
04:41:36 Trigger 🐾
I have Old Fort Days in the town I work in. Love that thing. Miss the Dandies
DSD Training Center
04:38:48 Spring <3
There's some smaller ones within like 200 miles of me, but no one really goes to them because the Big 4 (The Horse Heaven Roundup, Walla Walla Frontier Days, Lewiston Roundeup and the Pendleton Roundup,) attract so many people. I have recently gotten interest in roping and barrels and stuff like that, though I've been having to teach Sophie how to rope, but thankfully not run barrels because the guy who trained her also trains barrel horses, so
Wraithcry Farm
04:35:27 Trigger 🐾
We have so many rodeos. So many. All year long. I have nothing against them, I started on barrels. I just, ended up discovering I really did not like it. How I ended up slowing down makes no sense to me, but I love and am passionate about what I do now.
Wraithcry Farm
04:34:02 Trigger 🐾
There is also associations that have their own circuit but limited number of shows.
Like the link I just shared? 5 shows a year lol. The dressage association is about the same where the other circuit will have 7-8 shows and your horse can really be shown off for all its training. I prefer those circuits.
DSD Training Center
04:33:50 Spring <3
We mainly have western circuts, and the only rodeo stuff we have near me that we can do is like Barrel Club and then stuff you do on your own, but that's because my surrounding rodeos are the Big 4.
BlackRose
04:33:44 Stella
Do you mean the basics of it? Sorry for the silly question
Wraithcry Farm
04:31:43 Trigger 🐾
We have maybe 2 circuits that have English and Western events, the rest is rodeo. English is really hard to find and it is also something that is hard to find someone who teaches it safely.
The Old Gods
04:31:00 Void Malign
Anyway. Need to go feed everyone before it gets any colder
BlackRose
04:30:54 Stella
How do I enter dress up contests?
DSD Training Center
04:30:18 Spring <3
We have some big pleasure shows that attract a lot of people from out of state, but we really only have clinics and schooling shows for really any English disciplines.
Wraithcry Farm
04:29:55 Trigger 🐾
I am sorry it is a pet peeve, and I am sorry I struck it, but I am going to stick with what people call it in my area since that makes sense to the people who are around me. And I am also not one who cares about wording either. I am not doing it professionally nor do I plan on competing outside my area. Local only. With that, I am dropping it.

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Im writing a story (Most likely trash) December 19, 2020 08:38 PM

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This story is about a 12-year-old human-animal hybrid (called an Animorphi) named Auburn, her roommates, and an evil force planning to destroy the human population and let the Animorph rise to greatness. Here's the document, for those who wish to read:
(I changed the settings, it should work)
Any ideas? Comments? Constructive criticism?
PLEASE don't edit the document, leave comments instead!
Im writing a story (Most likely trash) December 20, 2020 02:34 PM

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hi! i didn't read it all through yet, but I definitely have some tips for you c:

-try not to infodump, especially at the beginning of the story. this can definitely deter readers and makes establishing a clear voice difficult. reveal things the POV character knows over time, or more subtly to make it feel more natural, especially when writing in first person.

-try to write numbers and such out in words, this makes the flow seem much less choppy. when listing things that the character is thinking about try to go train of thought and not do a)this and b) this. It doesn't flow very nicely

-with dialogue, especially when it's going fast-paced, you don't need to tag every line if it is clear who's talking! (ex. "woah," she said) it can slow things down and make the dialogue unrealistic.

that's all I have after kinda skimming the first few pages. You're doing a good job! Creating a consistent writing style just takes time! You'll get there eventually, keep it up <3
Im writing a story (Most likely trash) December 20, 2020 02:37 PM

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High Altitude Horses said:
hi! i didn't read it all through yet, but I definitely have some tips for you c:

-try not to infodump, especially at the beginning of the story. this can definitely deter readers and makes establishing a clear voice difficult. reveal things the POV character knows over time, or more subtly to make it feel more natural, especially when writing in first person.

-try to write numbers and such out in words, this makes the flow seem much less choppy. when listing things that the character is thinking about try to go train of thought and not do a)this and b) this. It doesn't flow very nicely

-with dialogue, especially when it's going fast-paced, you don't need to tag every line if it is clear who's talking! (ex. "woah," she said) it can slow things down and make the dialogue unrealistic.

that's all I have after kinda skimming the first few pages. You're doing a good job! Creating a consistent writing style just takes time! You'll get there eventually, keep it up <3


Thank you! I've been going through and deleting all the unnecessary information

Edited at December 20, 2020 02:38 PM by SweetFire Fields

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