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Minerva
01:20:04 Min
I was thinking about this the other day actually! If shit really hit the fan in a big way I'd be one of the most popular people in the village because I have a pony that's already happy pulling. Think she's the only driven pony in the surrounding villages at the moment actually
Ironhorse
01:16:03 Sting
Hopefully.
We will always need resources though, which are also not renewable. If we want to continue to make things. Solar Panels, Phones, Cars etc
All the materials to make those come From the ground.

I just hope that we learn to actually recycle better and more efficiently.
Gem
01:13:44 Gem
Sting,
Hopefully by that point the world will have woken up a little bit and we'll finally transition to renewables. We have all of the technology and resources to do so now, it's just politics and capitalism standing in the way (coming from an Environmental studies major)
Ironhorse
01:12:37 Sting
Yeah I mean, sure we do.
It'll run out eventually though.
My husband works in mining, so I understand it all very well.
Highglen Ridge
01:12:02 Cali | TBs
Opinions on my palette im working on?
The Old Gods
01:11:54 Void Malign
I just have that screenshot which has been sitting around in my imgur account for I have no idea how long
The Old Gods
01:10:53 Void Malign
Nah. The original file was so many layers. I had multiple layers for the shading, highlights, the tail, then the lineart I was working off of.
Morning Glory Farms
01:10:35 Dino/Digital Tyrant
We have so long until we actually *run* out of fuel, especially for countries that actually refine their own
Ashcroft Park Stud
01:09:42 Ash
Ohhh it’s lovely, and I low-key enjoy the watermark on it 😅 Relatable. You might be able to save it if the file is big enough , would be a shame to lose it
Ironhorse
01:08:03 Sting
Jeri.
Those horses will be important when we run out of fuel and need to start using them all again.
The halter horses wont be able to stand up to being ridden every day. Or helping plough
The Old Gods
01:07:39 Void Malign
Ashcroft: I was working on something at one point, but forget why I stopped. Don't have access to the file anymore since it's on another computer that probably doesn't work anymore lol -Click-
Jericho Stables
01:06:31 
Ugh Wicket is awful
Greenheart Stables
01:06:18 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
Wicket the Horse for example
Ironhorse
01:05:18 Sting
Totally agree Void.

Stop the trend breeding and stop breeding horses with genetic diseases just because of their "Winnings"

There are hundreds of Metallic Cat Sons...pick one that is free of diseases. It cant be that hard
Jericho Stables
01:04:52 
I love the "retro" breeders trying to bring breeds back to their original healthy standard. Sad they are shamed for not meeting modern breed standards
Ranch Lands Training
01:04:51 Lilly/PON Addict
Like is popular for a reason. But yeah, there are way better younger stallions. He had his moment and I think it's okay if he falls off as the "it WP stallion" for a while
Morning Glory Farms
01:04:00 Dino/Digital Tyrant
I dont even think hes nice to be honest, theres much nicer Western Pleasure horses out there
The Old Gods
01:03:28 Void Malign
Honestly, trends need to stay out of animal breeding entirely unless it's something that's for the betterment of the breed e.g that group that wants to give pugs a more normal muzzle
Ranch Lands Training
01:03:20 Lilly/PON Addict
*her* stallion
Ashcroft Park Stud
01:03:18 Ash
Ooh you totally should, Void. We need more painted art ❤️

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Minerva
01:20:04 Min
I was thinking about this the other day actually! If shit really hit the fan in a big way I'd be one of the most popular people in the village because I have a pony that's already happy pulling. Think she's the only driven pony in the surrounding villages at the moment actually
Ironhorse
01:16:03 Sting
Hopefully.
We will always need resources though, which are also not renewable. If we want to continue to make things. Solar Panels, Phones, Cars etc
All the materials to make those come From the ground.

I just hope that we learn to actually recycle better and more efficiently.
Gem
01:13:44 Gem
Sting,
Hopefully by that point the world will have woken up a little bit and we'll finally transition to renewables. We have all of the technology and resources to do so now, it's just politics and capitalism standing in the way (coming from an Environmental studies major)
Ironhorse
01:12:37 Sting
Yeah I mean, sure we do.
It'll run out eventually though.
My husband works in mining, so I understand it all very well.
Highglen Ridge
01:12:02 Cali | TBs
Opinions on my palette im working on?
The Old Gods
01:11:54 Void Malign
I just have that screenshot which has been sitting around in my imgur account for I have no idea how long
The Old Gods
01:10:53 Void Malign
Nah. The original file was so many layers. I had multiple layers for the shading, highlights, the tail, then the lineart I was working off of.
Morning Glory Farms
01:10:35 Dino/Digital Tyrant
We have so long until we actually *run* out of fuel, especially for countries that actually refine their own
Ashcroft Park Stud
01:09:42 Ash
Ohhh it’s lovely, and I low-key enjoy the watermark on it 😅 Relatable. You might be able to save it if the file is big enough , would be a shame to lose it
Ironhorse
01:08:03 Sting
Jeri.
Those horses will be important when we run out of fuel and need to start using them all again.
The halter horses wont be able to stand up to being ridden every day. Or helping plough
The Old Gods
01:07:39 Void Malign
Ashcroft: I was working on something at one point, but forget why I stopped. Don't have access to the file anymore since it's on another computer that probably doesn't work anymore lol -Click-
Jericho Stables
01:06:31 
Ugh Wicket is awful
Greenheart Stables
01:06:18 Gren|Grenlin|Snek
Wicket the Horse for example
Ironhorse
01:05:18 Sting
Totally agree Void.

Stop the trend breeding and stop breeding horses with genetic diseases just because of their "Winnings"

There are hundreds of Metallic Cat Sons...pick one that is free of diseases. It cant be that hard
Jericho Stables
01:04:52 
I love the "retro" breeders trying to bring breeds back to their original healthy standard. Sad they are shamed for not meeting modern breed standards
Ranch Lands Training
01:04:51 Lilly/PON Addict
Like is popular for a reason. But yeah, there are way better younger stallions. He had his moment and I think it's okay if he falls off as the "it WP stallion" for a while
Morning Glory Farms
01:04:00 Dino/Digital Tyrant
I dont even think hes nice to be honest, theres much nicer Western Pleasure horses out there
The Old Gods
01:03:28 Void Malign
Honestly, trends need to stay out of animal breeding entirely unless it's something that's for the betterment of the breed e.g that group that wants to give pugs a more normal muzzle
Ranch Lands Training
01:03:20 Lilly/PON Addict
*her* stallion
Ashcroft Park Stud
01:03:18 Ash
Ooh you totally should, Void. We need more painted art ❤️

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Im writing a story (Most likely trash) December 19, 2020 08:38 PM

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This story is about a 12-year-old human-animal hybrid (called an Animorphi) named Auburn, her roommates, and an evil force planning to destroy the human population and let the Animorph rise to greatness. Here's the document, for those who wish to read:
(I changed the settings, it should work)
Any ideas? Comments? Constructive criticism?
PLEASE don't edit the document, leave comments instead!
Im writing a story (Most likely trash) December 20, 2020 02:34 PM

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hi! i didn't read it all through yet, but I definitely have some tips for you c:

-try not to infodump, especially at the beginning of the story. this can definitely deter readers and makes establishing a clear voice difficult. reveal things the POV character knows over time, or more subtly to make it feel more natural, especially when writing in first person.

-try to write numbers and such out in words, this makes the flow seem much less choppy. when listing things that the character is thinking about try to go train of thought and not do a)this and b) this. It doesn't flow very nicely

-with dialogue, especially when it's going fast-paced, you don't need to tag every line if it is clear who's talking! (ex. "woah," she said) it can slow things down and make the dialogue unrealistic.

that's all I have after kinda skimming the first few pages. You're doing a good job! Creating a consistent writing style just takes time! You'll get there eventually, keep it up <3
Im writing a story (Most likely trash) December 20, 2020 02:37 PM

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High Altitude Horses said:
hi! i didn't read it all through yet, but I definitely have some tips for you c:

-try not to infodump, especially at the beginning of the story. this can definitely deter readers and makes establishing a clear voice difficult. reveal things the POV character knows over time, or more subtly to make it feel more natural, especially when writing in first person.

-try to write numbers and such out in words, this makes the flow seem much less choppy. when listing things that the character is thinking about try to go train of thought and not do a)this and b) this. It doesn't flow very nicely

-with dialogue, especially when it's going fast-paced, you don't need to tag every line if it is clear who's talking! (ex. "woah," she said) it can slow things down and make the dialogue unrealistic.

that's all I have after kinda skimming the first few pages. You're doing a good job! Creating a consistent writing style just takes time! You'll get there eventually, keep it up <3


Thank you! I've been going through and deleting all the unnecessary information

Edited at December 20, 2020 02:38 PM by SweetFire Fields

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