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Palomino Mountain
06:00:17 
oh for sure if you worked haha. I worked in a grocery store for four years and man you cannot pay me to go back there.
Gem Queens Estate
06:00:16 Snow❆Gem
I have to go now. Thank you everyone. I feel better having a plan. :)

Have a good night everyone!
Gem Queens Estate
05:59:31 Snow❆Gem
@keo

I'm humorous with family. At work, barely.
Gem Queens Estate
05:58:59 Snow❆Gem
@palomino

Yup, amazing. I'd lose my job doing that though. lol
The Old Gods
05:58:27 Void Malign
...right
Gem Queens Estate
05:57:57 Snow❆Gem
@keo

I have social anxiety. Kicks my butt so bad when I'm around the guy I like. >.> And idiot sandwich is a great non-swearword. XD And I see. He's a nervous lot, tried to get my approval the first several weeks with humor...
Palomino Mountain
05:56:33 
I mean like he flipped her grocery cart upside down and all her groceries spilled everywhere. She burst into tears and he said he would be reporting her to her church. who hits a child on PURPOSE and anyway it was amazing
Nordic Designs
05:56:32 Keo/ Ice/ Tiny
I usually like to keep things silly and lighthearted but personal space grinnndsss my gears XD
Nordic Designs
05:55:43 Keo/ Ice/ Tiny
And not to say you dont love your brother, husband and I are chosen family and we dont mind being in eachothers space because we chose it. Your brother is family and doesnt need to be in your space and nor do you need to want/allow that LOL
Gem Queens Estate
05:55:08 Snow❆Gem
@keo

Holy moly! O.o

@palomini

OH, MY GOSH! I'd do that in a heartbeat, to shove a cart of a customer if I saw that near me... I hope my job wouldn't be on the line though.
Nordic Designs
05:54:30 Keo/ Ice/ Tiny
I think thats a good theory. When I'm in the store with my husband I'm all up in his business usually because I'm trying soooo hard to stay out of strangers space and take up as little of space as possible. Of course.. we have talked about this and he's fine with it and gets just as angry as I do about the strangers but not me
The Old Gods
05:54:06 Void Malign
-HEE Click- pretty
Nordic Designs
05:53:02 Keo/ Ice/ Tiny
After 11+ years of military I dont know how long I'd last in a grocery store before I got fired for calling someone something along the lines of an idiot sandwich or something else I get away with on the daily XD
Gem Queens Estate
05:52:08 Snow❆Gem
I think this is his problem...

Nervous energy
Sometimes, people move closer when they feel anxious or stressed. In such instances, a coworker hovering during a tense conversation may not be intentionally invading your space, but simply seeking reassurance or support. Introverts might experience this as pressure, while extroverts thrive on proximity.
Nordic Designs
05:51:56 Keo/ Ice/ Tiny
Mostly same boulder except... Im eepy sleepy all the time so when I do go its a rare occasion and normal hours but every single time it ravenously tickles my social anxiety from people being in my muthafuggin bubble XD
Gem Queens Estate
05:51:09 Snow❆Gem
@keo

I agree. And I only work part time in a grocery store. When I get more hours, it'll be more nuts to deal with. lol
Boulder Creek
05:50:43 
I don't leave the house if I don't have to, to avoid people. And go late at night to the stores
Palomino Mountain
05:50:31 
My fave memory when I was a kid is a lady intentionally hit me with her cart. Knocked me over etc and my dad flipped her cart of groceries right there in the store :)
Nordic Designs
05:50:29 Keo/ Ice/ Tiny
30 in June here, But I've also been in the military for the last 11.5 years and within the last 7 months Ive been given 94 people to be in charge of and they have tested every last one of my nerves, and disappointed me even when I expected to be disappointed
Nordic Designs
05:49:14 Keo/ Ice/ Tiny
People are freakin NUTS XD

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Palomino Mountain
06:00:17 
oh for sure if you worked haha. I worked in a grocery store for four years and man you cannot pay me to go back there.
Gem Queens Estate
06:00:16 Snow❆Gem
I have to go now. Thank you everyone. I feel better having a plan. :)

Have a good night everyone!
Gem Queens Estate
05:59:31 Snow❆Gem
@keo

I'm humorous with family. At work, barely.
Gem Queens Estate
05:58:59 Snow❆Gem
@palomino

Yup, amazing. I'd lose my job doing that though. lol
The Old Gods
05:58:27 Void Malign
...right
Gem Queens Estate
05:57:57 Snow❆Gem
@keo

I have social anxiety. Kicks my butt so bad when I'm around the guy I like. >.> And idiot sandwich is a great non-swearword. XD And I see. He's a nervous lot, tried to get my approval the first several weeks with humor...
Palomino Mountain
05:56:33 
I mean like he flipped her grocery cart upside down and all her groceries spilled everywhere. She burst into tears and he said he would be reporting her to her church. who hits a child on PURPOSE and anyway it was amazing
Nordic Designs
05:56:32 Keo/ Ice/ Tiny
I usually like to keep things silly and lighthearted but personal space grinnndsss my gears XD
Nordic Designs
05:55:43 Keo/ Ice/ Tiny
And not to say you dont love your brother, husband and I are chosen family and we dont mind being in eachothers space because we chose it. Your brother is family and doesnt need to be in your space and nor do you need to want/allow that LOL
Gem Queens Estate
05:55:08 Snow❆Gem
@keo

Holy moly! O.o

@palomini

OH, MY GOSH! I'd do that in a heartbeat, to shove a cart of a customer if I saw that near me... I hope my job wouldn't be on the line though.
Nordic Designs
05:54:30 Keo/ Ice/ Tiny
I think thats a good theory. When I'm in the store with my husband I'm all up in his business usually because I'm trying soooo hard to stay out of strangers space and take up as little of space as possible. Of course.. we have talked about this and he's fine with it and gets just as angry as I do about the strangers but not me
The Old Gods
05:54:06 Void Malign
-HEE Click- pretty
Nordic Designs
05:53:02 Keo/ Ice/ Tiny
After 11+ years of military I dont know how long I'd last in a grocery store before I got fired for calling someone something along the lines of an idiot sandwich or something else I get away with on the daily XD
Gem Queens Estate
05:52:08 Snow❆Gem
I think this is his problem...

Nervous energy
Sometimes, people move closer when they feel anxious or stressed. In such instances, a coworker hovering during a tense conversation may not be intentionally invading your space, but simply seeking reassurance or support. Introverts might experience this as pressure, while extroverts thrive on proximity.
Nordic Designs
05:51:56 Keo/ Ice/ Tiny
Mostly same boulder except... Im eepy sleepy all the time so when I do go its a rare occasion and normal hours but every single time it ravenously tickles my social anxiety from people being in my muthafuggin bubble XD
Gem Queens Estate
05:51:09 Snow❆Gem
@keo

I agree. And I only work part time in a grocery store. When I get more hours, it'll be more nuts to deal with. lol
Boulder Creek
05:50:43 
I don't leave the house if I don't have to, to avoid people. And go late at night to the stores
Palomino Mountain
05:50:31 
My fave memory when I was a kid is a lady intentionally hit me with her cart. Knocked me over etc and my dad flipped her cart of groceries right there in the store :)
Nordic Designs
05:50:29 Keo/ Ice/ Tiny
30 in June here, But I've also been in the military for the last 11.5 years and within the last 7 months Ive been given 94 people to be in charge of and they have tested every last one of my nerves, and disappointed me even when I expected to be disappointed
Nordic Designs
05:49:14 Keo/ Ice/ Tiny
People are freakin NUTS XD

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I'm Writing a Thing December 17, 2020 04:30 PM


TenaciTea
 
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For those of you who don't know me, hi. I exist. *waves awkwardly*
I wrote a story last summer, submitted it to an anthology, and it got published (I have a link to the google doc containing that short story on my profile page :D)
This year, I wrote something in a free write for AP Literature that I've decided is an idea worth exploring. The free write itself is in my blog somewhere, in case you want to check it out (it's not polished at all)
So I decided- I'm going to write a medium length story about it!
As of this post:
-I haven't exactly settled on the plot. There are a handful of concrete ideas I have picked out, and they have to do with making the story as eerie as possible.
-Characters I am still working on.
-I've got a kind of "prologue" finished, and I would love any thoughts or insight into what I've done so far. Critique is welcome. As are questions.
This is the link to what I've got so far:
(the name is not final and I am open to suggestions)
I'm Writing a Thing December 17, 2020 04:41 PM


Lucky Ranch
 
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O.O I exist too. Omg-
I'm Writing a Thing December 17, 2020 04:53 PM


Savannah Stables
 
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O i exist too
I'm Writing a Thing December 17, 2020 05:43 PM

Former Stable
 
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Hey, Tea! Love the title, already has me thinking "What in the world?"
Awesome job!
I'm Writing a Thing December 17, 2020 09:37 PM


TenaciTea
 
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SweetFire Fields said:
Hey, Tea! Love the title, already has me thinking "What in the world?"
Awesome job!


I aspire to inspire confused horror. :D
I'm Writing a Thing December 18, 2020 12:44 PM


Darkside Dreams
 
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Oh my god I LOVE IT.
I don't really have any critiques, you're doing great so far! Honestly for your first draft, get words on paper and worry about grammar and word choice later. Write the story. Write it your way. After that's finished, take a step back and look at it objectively. Get some other people to read it and suggest, read it out loud, and that's when you get the flamethrowers out and burn the thing to pieces before stitching it back together into a final draft.
Tl;dr: write the damn thing and edit it into a real book later.

It looks awesome so far!

I'm Writing a Thing December 18, 2020 12:46 PM


TenaciTea
 
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Sunshine Jumpers said:
Oh my god I LOVE IT.
I don't really have any critiques, you're doing great so far! Honestly for your first draft, get words on paper and worry about grammar and word choice later. Write the story. Write it your way. After that's finished, take a step back and look at it objectively. Get some other people to read it and suggest, read it out loud, and that's when you get the flamethrowers out and burn the thing to pieces before stitching it back together into a final draft.
Tl;dr: write the damn thing and edit it into a real book later.

It looks awesome so far!



Thank you! :D
I'm Writing a Thing December 18, 2020 12:53 PM


Broadway
 
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That was amazing! The word choice is perfect and really gets the story across well! You have to let us know when this is finished because it is something I would love to read!
I'm Writing a Thing December 18, 2020 01:01 PM


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Birch Wood Barns said:
That was amazing! The word choice is perfect and really gets the story across well! You have to let us know when this is finished because it is something I would love to read!


Aww thank you!
I'm glad you all seem to like my elevator murder weirdness xD
I'm Writing a Thing December 18, 2020 04:30 PM

Former Stable
 
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If the other workers are acting like this is normal and she's surprised maybe make this her first week on the job? Also if there's an elevator but no warning not to take it maybe taking the elevator is a test for people? Also how does the murderer leave if the body slumps right as it opens on the third floor?

Some of your word choices made me have to reread the sentence but it's pretty good. "too-late paramedics" feels particularly clumsy in the sentence.


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