Leafpool
09:56:08 Leaf
I have 4 in a futurity so good luck!
Glacier Bay Cove
09:54:16 Angel Cats🐈
Thanks,
Jester,
Leaf
Next RO, I will enter one or two foals and see what happens with them
Leafpool
09:50:47 Leaf
I think it is 500?
KPH Equestrian
09:50:43 Rapcoon | Jester
glacier
1500ebs at birth, and I think ya just show them like normal :)
KPH Equestrian
09:50:05 Rapcoon | Jester
Considering this +Int, thoughts? So glad TBs and AAs may be getting more grey xD
-HEE Click-
Leafpool
09:50:02 Leaf
Angel give me one second!!
Glacier Bay Cove
09:44:47 Angel Cats🐈
How much does it cost to enter Futurity shows
Leafpool
09:40:16 Leaf
Geek that looks like its so much fun!
Leafpool
09:38:25 Leaf
Geek awesome!
Dark Shadows Estate
09:38:17 Bazz
I gave my accountant coffee before I enter more shows haha
Transformers Acres
09:37:49 Geek
Leaf

Yep! He's won several trophies, and some good ol' cash from it.
Leafpool
09:36:53 Leaf
Geek cool!
Transformers Acres
09:35:30 Geek
Here's a derby video of what our derbies were like. My dad is #53

-YT Click-
Nordic Designs
09:34:05 Keonah
accountant is cranky lol. You wont be cranky tomorrow dude shut up XD
Nordic Designs
09:32:48 Keonah
that wasnt supposed to send yet lol, futurites it is hahah, thank you XD
Nordic Designs
09:32:28 Keonah
OHHHHHH
Dark Shadows Estate
09:30:54 Bazz
Did you enter fut shows? I dont think they count towards the show count.
Revel Ranch
09:30:27 
Hmm, should I work on my puzzle or read?
ShiningStar Stables
09:29:37 Chey / Star
Level 7 race up
Dark Shadows Estate
09:28:46 Bazz
@Keo, I should probably should enter more horses! I was lazy yesterday and only showed BM entered horses
You must be a registered member for more
than 1 day before you can use our chatbox.

Rules   Hide
You are in: Main Chat
View Sales
 Year: 186   Season: Summer   $: 0 Tue 09:56pm CST  
 Forecast: Partly Cloudy, Rain PossibleGo Raid 


Forums

→ Horse Eden is a fun game! Sign Up Now!

My Subscriptions
My Bookmarks
My Topics
Latest Topics
Following
Forums > Rider's Lounge > Writer's Nook
   1 

   Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 07:25 PM


Rivendell Steeds
 
Posts: 1206
#980572
Give Award
Okay, so I got bored a few weeks ago, and decided to start writing a novel in my boredom. I've -technically- written a first chapter, besides this short introduction, but I honestly think I lost my imagination for it. I won't be posting that here (yet), however, here is the introduction. Let me know what you think!

I'm basically going to treat this forum as a wiki for this novel, and a place for suggestions on it. If you have any name ideas, let me know!

Pronuciation help:
Yilyviad - (Yee-Leh-vee-add)
Leolwin - (Lee-OH-L-w-ih-n)
Plyth - (Pl-eye-th)
Mythius - (M-ih-th-EE-us)
Ryenni - (R-ee-eh-nee)
Zykria - (Z-ih-cr-ee-a)
Octrey - (Awe-c-tree)


- Introduction -
The roaring winds sweep past as we go. The fearsome cries of the nearby fractures surround the cove. As the waves crash against the rough edges of the cliffs, so do the other riders. It’s just us. Us, against the swarms of the hideous beasts we call fractures. It always makes me sad to think these creatures were once leolwins.

A long time ago, we elves weren’t the only life-bringing creatures in Yilyviad, there were also leolwins. These magical beasts were giant, and beautiful. With wings like dragons, and the body of a canine, they ruled fairly over all other creatures. We lived in harmony with these creatures, but in the end, it was us who destroyed them.

Throughout history, elves were known to be fearsome warriors, and great allies, but that all changed when the plyths came along. The plyths were a form of corrupted elves that had been tortured and left for dead. Their hatred for our kind grew so much that they would cut their own ears off to not look like us. Soon enough, they sought to destroy the thing we valued above all.

On the day we call “The Accident to Change it All”, my youngest brother Mythius let in a plyth child. She told him her name was Ryenni, and that her ears had been injured in an encounter with a griffin. He led her directly to the heart of Zykria, looking to get her into a temporary home. It was then when she made her move. Using a concealed staff, she knocked out Mythius, and set a beacon for the plyth warriors to teleport to.

One by one, the leolwins were infected by the spells used on them, and all but a few were turned into ravengeous monsters. Many surviving leolwins fled to the upper regions of Octrey, to live in hiding. The rest coincide with us elves, helping fight against the plyths. Some are used as mounts in battles, others as decoys.

Extra Info:
Setting - This story takes place in 3026, in the far future. Humanity resorted to war, and ended up destroying most of Earth in WWIV. The elves stayed in hiding throughout the reign of the humans, but emerged to end the destruction and violence they caused. Most of humanity has died off, and all that remains of the humans are the half-elves; the result of the cross-breeding of humans and elves. Since the elves came into power in 2079, all magical creatures were able to return to thrive on Earth.

Inspirations - Lord of the Rings, Harry Potter, The Unwanteds, Nier: Automata, and many, many more fantasy/equine novels.

Things to Note - This is a WIP. Not the finished, or even halfway done product. Also, this isn't a fanfic. Ideas may have aspects that other novels share, like magic, mythical beasts, etc. but no main ideas are ripped off/stolen.

What do you think I should add to this novel? Should I continue writing it? Feedback is well appreciated!

Edited at April 15, 2022 07:30 PM by Rivendell Steeds
Fantasy Novel - Need Feedback! - WIP April 15, 2022 09:26 PM


FirstLightFarms

Trivia Team
 
Posts: 3658
#980598
Give Award
Very cool concept! I'd be intrigued in where you go with it :)

Forums > Rider's Lounge > Writer's Nook
   1 

Refresh



Copyright ©2009-2025 Go Go Gatsby Designs, LLC    All Rights Reserved

Terms Of Use  |   Privacy Policy   DMCA   |   Contact Us
Help Me (0)  |   Game Rules   |  Reset Palette