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Namerik Stables
02:37:59 Rose
My mum used to put the bit in our mouths if we tugged on the horses mouth too hard
Greenheart Stables
02:19:28 Green|Gren|Grenlin
Yeah I need to give Mass Effect (the game) a break if im starting to have my dreams themed around it 😭, that was one hellava nightmare
Transformers Acres
01:31:00 Geek, Greek Yogurt
Rapcoon

My dad isn't the greatest, he ain't perfect. But yet, he knows the difference between abuse and proper discipline. So does my mom.
ghost light stables
01:29:34 Ghost rapcoon(the og
Greek
Good for him ^^ your dad is such a mood XD
Transformers Acres
01:27:33 Geek, Greek Yogurt
I had a neighbor who owned horses, five to be exact. My dad would whoop my ass if I even accidentally hurt any future horse.
ghost light stables
01:25:08 Ghost rapcoon(the og
Greek
I feel like your dad would be one to slap someone for using a spade bit 😭 -Click-
I ride my geling in a chicken choker and I get so much hate for it lmao
Transformers Acres
01:20:22 Geek, Greek Yogurt
Rapcoon

He hates how the Amish treat their horses. I'm not saying all Amish people do it, but a majority of them do.
ghost light stables
01:19:29 Ghost rapcoon(the og
Greek
Good to know your dad's humane enough to have that mindset. I wish more people though like that
Transformers Acres
01:18:34 Geek, Greek Yogurt
Rapcoon

I agree. I asked my dad, who grew up, and owned a horse, if he ever did that. He said he'd never hurt his mare, because, despite not liking horses much, he still knows they're living beings.
ghost light stables
01:17:22 Ghost rapcoon(the og
Greek
Their is very very very little laws against livestock abuse horses don't count as pets they fall into the same category as sheep and cows. If the law payed morse attention to the abuse in the horse industry the horse industry would be so much better to
Transformers Acres
01:15:20 Geek, Greek Yogurt
Rapcoon

Agreed. I have seen worse, and better. What really pisses me off, however, is Amish people abusing their horses, and the law doesn't go after them.
KPH Equestrian
01:15:13 Rapcoon | Jester
Ok I actually need to go to bed now xD
KPH Equestrian
01:14:41 Rapcoon | Jester
Geek
Yes exactly that! He's just so aggressive for no reason. It may work with some horses but its not a one size fits all thing
ghost light stables
01:13:55 Ghost rapcoon(the og
I've definitely seen worse people then Clinton but I've also seen better so 🤷🏼‍♀️
Dash Warmbloods
01:13:31 
-HEE Click- This amuses me
Transformers Acres
01:13:12 Geek, Greek Yogurt
Rapcoon

I mean, I don't know him, so I also can't say he abuses them indefinitely. However, I strongly hate his training methods.
Morning Glory Farms
01:12:32 Terici/Dino/Trish
Youre not spamming chat youre fine, its stable > stable activities > set stable colours
KPH Equestrian
01:11:49 Rapcoon | Jester
Geek
I dont particularly like him. There's one gross video on his channel where he works with a blind horse. The horses owner did way better with him than Clinton did
ghost light stables
01:11:38 Ghost rapcoon(the og
Greek
He can be fun to talk too though decently nice guy when he doesn't piss himself off
Dash Warmbloods
01:11:32 
76 repeated horses in 10 generations: 🤣

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Namerik Stables
02:37:59 Rose
My mum used to put the bit in our mouths if we tugged on the horses mouth too hard
Greenheart Stables
02:19:28 Green|Gren|Grenlin
Yeah I need to give Mass Effect (the game) a break if im starting to have my dreams themed around it 😭, that was one hellava nightmare
Transformers Acres
01:31:00 Geek, Greek Yogurt
Rapcoon

My dad isn't the greatest, he ain't perfect. But yet, he knows the difference between abuse and proper discipline. So does my mom.
ghost light stables
01:29:34 Ghost rapcoon(the og
Greek
Good for him ^^ your dad is such a mood XD
Transformers Acres
01:27:33 Geek, Greek Yogurt
I had a neighbor who owned horses, five to be exact. My dad would whoop my ass if I even accidentally hurt any future horse.
ghost light stables
01:25:08 Ghost rapcoon(the og
Greek
I feel like your dad would be one to slap someone for using a spade bit 😭 -Click-
I ride my geling in a chicken choker and I get so much hate for it lmao
Transformers Acres
01:20:22 Geek, Greek Yogurt
Rapcoon

He hates how the Amish treat their horses. I'm not saying all Amish people do it, but a majority of them do.
ghost light stables
01:19:29 Ghost rapcoon(the og
Greek
Good to know your dad's humane enough to have that mindset. I wish more people though like that
Transformers Acres
01:18:34 Geek, Greek Yogurt
Rapcoon

I agree. I asked my dad, who grew up, and owned a horse, if he ever did that. He said he'd never hurt his mare, because, despite not liking horses much, he still knows they're living beings.
ghost light stables
01:17:22 Ghost rapcoon(the og
Greek
Their is very very very little laws against livestock abuse horses don't count as pets they fall into the same category as sheep and cows. If the law payed morse attention to the abuse in the horse industry the horse industry would be so much better to
Transformers Acres
01:15:20 Geek, Greek Yogurt
Rapcoon

Agreed. I have seen worse, and better. What really pisses me off, however, is Amish people abusing their horses, and the law doesn't go after them.
KPH Equestrian
01:15:13 Rapcoon | Jester
Ok I actually need to go to bed now xD
KPH Equestrian
01:14:41 Rapcoon | Jester
Geek
Yes exactly that! He's just so aggressive for no reason. It may work with some horses but its not a one size fits all thing
ghost light stables
01:13:55 Ghost rapcoon(the og
I've definitely seen worse people then Clinton but I've also seen better so 🤷🏼‍♀️
Dash Warmbloods
01:13:31 
-HEE Click- This amuses me
Transformers Acres
01:13:12 Geek, Greek Yogurt
Rapcoon

I mean, I don't know him, so I also can't say he abuses them indefinitely. However, I strongly hate his training methods.
Morning Glory Farms
01:12:32 Terici/Dino/Trish
Youre not spamming chat youre fine, its stable > stable activities > set stable colours
KPH Equestrian
01:11:49 Rapcoon | Jester
Geek
I dont particularly like him. There's one gross video on his channel where he works with a blind horse. The horses owner did way better with him than Clinton did
ghost light stables
01:11:38 Ghost rapcoon(the og
Greek
He can be fun to talk too though decently nice guy when he doesn't piss himself off
Dash Warmbloods
01:11:32 
76 repeated horses in 10 generations: 🤣

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Im writing a story (Most likely trash) December 19, 2020 08:38 PM

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This story is about a 12-year-old human-animal hybrid (called an Animorphi) named Auburn, her roommates, and an evil force planning to destroy the human population and let the Animorph rise to greatness. Here's the document, for those who wish to read:
(I changed the settings, it should work)
Any ideas? Comments? Constructive criticism?
PLEASE don't edit the document, leave comments instead!
Im writing a story (Most likely trash) December 20, 2020 02:34 PM

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hi! i didn't read it all through yet, but I definitely have some tips for you c:

-try not to infodump, especially at the beginning of the story. this can definitely deter readers and makes establishing a clear voice difficult. reveal things the POV character knows over time, or more subtly to make it feel more natural, especially when writing in first person.

-try to write numbers and such out in words, this makes the flow seem much less choppy. when listing things that the character is thinking about try to go train of thought and not do a)this and b) this. It doesn't flow very nicely

-with dialogue, especially when it's going fast-paced, you don't need to tag every line if it is clear who's talking! (ex. "woah," she said) it can slow things down and make the dialogue unrealistic.

that's all I have after kinda skimming the first few pages. You're doing a good job! Creating a consistent writing style just takes time! You'll get there eventually, keep it up <3
Im writing a story (Most likely trash) December 20, 2020 02:37 PM

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High Altitude Horses said:
hi! i didn't read it all through yet, but I definitely have some tips for you c:

-try not to infodump, especially at the beginning of the story. this can definitely deter readers and makes establishing a clear voice difficult. reveal things the POV character knows over time, or more subtly to make it feel more natural, especially when writing in first person.

-try to write numbers and such out in words, this makes the flow seem much less choppy. when listing things that the character is thinking about try to go train of thought and not do a)this and b) this. It doesn't flow very nicely

-with dialogue, especially when it's going fast-paced, you don't need to tag every line if it is clear who's talking! (ex. "woah," she said) it can slow things down and make the dialogue unrealistic.

that's all I have after kinda skimming the first few pages. You're doing a good job! Creating a consistent writing style just takes time! You'll get there eventually, keep it up <3


Thank you! I've been going through and deleting all the unnecessary information

Edited at December 20, 2020 02:38 PM by SweetFire Fields

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