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EEE+ Broodmares at 4k. Bravery mares included! Some are W producers.

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 Asfamoth
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Mara Jade
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Moonlight Equestrian
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Winter/Christmas YHH auction
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Summit Stables
01:45:49 Summit
WWW KNN colt for sale. 1.3 mil. He has great potential. Willing to take offers on him as well. He is 1/1 color, and his dad is the #5 KNNLB stud. -HEE Click-
Ghostly Model Horses
01:13:46 Skyrim
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3 year old WWW rated ISH stallion for sale at 350k. He is 1/35 color rarity with tracked training.

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 Port Royal Equines
03:45:29 Elfie
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EEE+ Broodmares at 4k. Bravery mares included! Some are W producers.

-HEE Click-
Colored Captures, Sexed Embryos, Maps, Decor, and more! All items have been discounted.
Aerospace Equines
03:10:22 TBs
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Paradise Stables
02:34:34 Ariel / Tara
1. Auctioning off my best mares. All are either WW+, WW+ producers or both.
-HEE Click-

2. Geldings for sale. Most are 1000ebs.
-HEE Click-

3. More mares for sale. All breeds except tb.
-HEE Click-
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4. Stallions up for stud. Including #5 PON and free freshmans (KNN, WB).
-HEE Click-
 Asfamoth
02:28:14 Asfa
Like capturing? Wanna earn some EBs?
-HEE Click-
Active capture bounty for RIDs! Other bounties in my stable info.
Coral Reef
02:15:42 I'm Nemo
-HEE Click-

Auction EEE and color unrated
Thicc Acres
02:03:15 
Adventure maps in store :)

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Mara Jade
02:01:55 
Selling two EEP+ mares with World Class bravery ratings for 5k each!
Moonlight Equestrian
01:52:43 Moon
Winter/Christmas YHH auction
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Summit Stables
01:45:49 Summit
WWW KNN colt for sale. 1.3 mil. He has great potential. Willing to take offers on him as well. He is 1/1 color, and his dad is the #5 KNNLB stud. -HEE Click-
Ghostly Model Horses
01:13:46 Skyrim
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3 year old WWW rated ISH stallion for sale at 350k. He is 1/35 color rarity with tracked training.

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I'm Writing a Thing December 18, 2020 04:39 PM


 TenaciTea
 
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Pandora Creek said:

If the other workers are acting like this is normal and she's surprised maybe make this her first week on the job? Also if there's an elevator but no warning not to take it maybe taking the elevator is a test for people? Also how does the murderer leave if the body slumps right as it opens on the third floor?

Some of your word choices made me have to reread the sentence but it's pretty good. "too-late paramedics" feels particularly clumsy in the sentence.



The idea is that she's kind of isolated from what's going on (doesn't really pay much attention to the news, etc) and the behavior that's been spreading has been kind of normalized violence, justified by "laziness". She's not aware of it. I haven't figured out much of her backstory yet, but the fact that using elevators is generally frowned on (and in her place of work, responsible resource use is especially important) might contribute to why she hasn't witnessed this before.
And I never said which floor the elevator started from xD
Yep! This is only a first draft, I'll look into changing that sentence.

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