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Need more barn space but don't have the money for a barn? PM me! I have lots of space available for very cheap!
~.Oblivion.~
07:57:30 Obi
Current #8 freshman RID straws available in store. 30k each

Help me test him out! Minimum breeding of EEE

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Narran Park
07:52:25 Sting
Is anyone Selling a Sven?
Winter Tyme Ponies
07:50:00 Celeste
Color and rated PON, need gone -HEE Click-

 Winter Tyme Ponies
07:49:06 Celeste
Colored and rated PON auction. need -HEE Click-
Port Royal Equines
07:46:05 Elfie
-HEE Click-
Proven Seal Brown Dun ABLB WWW Sire. Multi WWW producer!

-HEE Click-
Proven Grullo Splash ABLB WWW Sire. Multi WWW producer!

-HEE Click-
Proven Silver Grullo LB WWW Sire.

-HEE Click-
Proven Grullo LB WWW Sire.
MakeEm Fancy
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EWW KNN wild mare. Amber champagne
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Looking Glass Stable
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⭐ADB Studs Up!⭐
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A whole host of exceptional ADB sires up for stud now, including the #1 TBBLB & #1 AABLB/ABBLB sires. Straws available!

⭐AD Broods!⭐
-HEE Click-
& Studs! Lovely colored EWE/EWW+ mares up for brood, snag them while you can! Embryos also available.

Happy RO! ♡
Dark Donkey
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WWW LB stallion for stud low price 5k for WWE combo mares can produce WWW foals only 5 slots left
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More stallions for breeding includes WWW pintaloosa
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I'm Writing a Thing December 18, 2020 04:39 PM


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Pandora Creek said:

If the other workers are acting like this is normal and she's surprised maybe make this her first week on the job? Also if there's an elevator but no warning not to take it maybe taking the elevator is a test for people? Also how does the murderer leave if the body slumps right as it opens on the third floor?

Some of your word choices made me have to reread the sentence but it's pretty good. "too-late paramedics" feels particularly clumsy in the sentence.



The idea is that she's kind of isolated from what's going on (doesn't really pay much attention to the news, etc) and the behavior that's been spreading has been kind of normalized violence, justified by "laziness". She's not aware of it. I haven't figured out much of her backstory yet, but the fact that using elevators is generally frowned on (and in her place of work, responsible resource use is especially important) might contribute to why she hasn't witnessed this before.
And I never said which floor the elevator started from xD
Yep! This is only a first draft, I'll look into changing that sentence.

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