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 Scorteni
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art auction!
lass
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Whispering Wood Barn
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Help Me Test My Freshie WWW TB boy who ages 3 Jan. 1st ^^
Looking Glass Stable
07:47:50 IA Glass 👋
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Merry belated Christmas all!!!
I'm doing my annual Sherpa capture spree!
For those interested, simply PM me what Breed(s) you would like, and I'll capture a Mare and Stallion for you, using a Sherpa Map each.
If you wanted to be surprised, just ask for Random!

Best of luck, and hope everyone has a lovely day! ♡
Port Royal Equines
07:16:08 Elfie
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Proven Seal Brown Dun ABLB WWW Sire. Multi WWW producer!

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Proven Grullo Splash ABLB WWW Sire. Multi WWW producer!

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Proven Silver Grullo LB WWW Sire.

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Proven Grullo LB WWW Sire.
Horse Haven Stables
06:35:14 HHS⎹ Lyla
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Auction!
Includes:
-Young EEE and EEW I/SH Mares
-SD J Mares
-Color
-WWW SH Stallion
Need them all gone, so please take a look!
§ Stablez
06:28:35 $yd_da_$quid77
Less than 24 hours left on this HUGE EEE+ clear out auction! Low starting prices and gorgeous colors! I also have a TON of horses for sale in my sale barns! Get them cheap before theyre gone! Don’t miss out on this one!

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Bermuda Triangle
05:57:14 Lost
Sooo can some of you nice breeders take a look at this stallion? WWW I want to explain that I stopped playing so this is his first year breeding!
He already produced a WWW with only 7 breedings so far!

If you have a www or nice eww ( any) you’re willing to breed to him let me know for a free cover/straw.!!

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AzureHorizonEstate
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Lucky Strides
05:38:44 Luck
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 Scorteni
08:19:14 crunch
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art auction!
lass
08:04:40 Captain America
-HEE Click-
Whispering Wood Barn
07:56:05 ~Whispy~
-HEE Click-

Help Me Test My Freshie WWW TB boy who ages 3 Jan. 1st ^^
Looking Glass Stable
07:47:50 IA Glass 👋
🎄🎁❄
Merry belated Christmas all!!!
I'm doing my annual Sherpa capture spree!
For those interested, simply PM me what Breed(s) you would like, and I'll capture a Mare and Stallion for you, using a Sherpa Map each.
If you wanted to be surprised, just ask for Random!

Best of luck, and hope everyone has a lovely day! ♡
Port Royal Equines
07:16:08 Elfie
-HEE Click-
Proven Seal Brown Dun ABLB WWW Sire. Multi WWW producer!

-HEE Click-
Proven Grullo Splash ABLB WWW Sire. Multi WWW producer!

-HEE Click-
Proven Silver Grullo LB WWW Sire.

-HEE Click-
Proven Grullo LB WWW Sire.
Horse Haven Stables
06:35:14 HHS⎹ Lyla
-HEE Click-
Auction!
Includes:
-Young EEE and EEW I/SH Mares
-SD J Mares
-Color
-WWW SH Stallion
Need them all gone, so please take a look!
§ Stablez
06:28:35 $yd_da_$quid77
Less than 24 hours left on this HUGE EEE+ clear out auction! Low starting prices and gorgeous colors! I also have a TON of horses for sale in my sale barns! Get them cheap before theyre gone! Don’t miss out on this one!

-HEE Click-
Bermuda Triangle
05:57:14 Lost
Sooo can some of you nice breeders take a look at this stallion? WWW I want to explain that I stopped playing so this is his first year breeding!
He already produced a WWW with only 7 breedings so far!

If you have a www or nice eww ( any) you’re willing to breed to him let me know for a free cover/straw.!!

-HEE Click-
AzureHorizonEstate
05:55:16 Azure
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art auction
Lucky Strides
05:38:44 Luck
XC medallion, Sherpa Map, Gold Embryo token, and more in my shop!

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I'm Writing a Thing December 18, 2020 04:39 PM


 TenaciTea
 
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Pandora Creek said:

If the other workers are acting like this is normal and she's surprised maybe make this her first week on the job? Also if there's an elevator but no warning not to take it maybe taking the elevator is a test for people? Also how does the murderer leave if the body slumps right as it opens on the third floor?

Some of your word choices made me have to reread the sentence but it's pretty good. "too-late paramedics" feels particularly clumsy in the sentence.



The idea is that she's kind of isolated from what's going on (doesn't really pay much attention to the news, etc) and the behavior that's been spreading has been kind of normalized violence, justified by "laziness". She's not aware of it. I haven't figured out much of her backstory yet, but the fact that using elevators is generally frowned on (and in her place of work, responsible resource use is especially important) might contribute to why she hasn't witnessed this before.
And I never said which floor the elevator started from xD
Yep! This is only a first draft, I'll look into changing that sentence.

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